Rules— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Are there any rules for students at your school?
受験者
Yes, there are a lot of rules for students in my school that includes discipline, good grades, and maintaining attendance. Most importantly, these are rules that are suit UH that our institute has implemented in order to create a more disciplined environment.
試験官
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
受験者
Yes, I think that students would definitely benefit more from more regulations in schools because I think that without rules, students wouldn't be able to shape up their personality and become the better versions of themselves and most importantly, learn from their mistakes.
試験官
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
受験者
Yes, I do have a teacher at my gallery institute. She really helps us in learning different cuisines and most importantly she never scolds us for our mistakes in cooking because she says that failures is failures in kitchen is what makes us more.
評価
総合
Part 1
Are there any rules for students at your school?
スコア: 65.0提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid filler words like "that are suit UH" which disrupt fluency. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct grammar errors, such as "rules that suit our institute" instead of "rules that are suit UH."
例: Yes, my school has several rules focusing on discipline, good grades, and attendance. These rules help create a more disciplined and productive learning environment.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
スコア: 70.0提案: Avoid repeating phrases like "I think" multiple times. Use linking words such as "because" and "moreover" to organize your ideas clearly. Also, try to be more specific about how rules help students improve.
例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from additional rules because they encourage self-discipline and help students learn from their mistakes, ultimately shaping their personalities positively.
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
スコア: 60.0提案: Improve clarity by correcting grammar and avoiding repetition. Use linking words like "and" or "because" to connect ideas. Also, be more specific about how the teacher helps and encourages students.
例: Yes, I have a teacher at my culinary institute who helps us learn various cuisines. She encourages us by saying that mistakes in the kitchen are valuable lessons that help us improve.
文法
× Yes, there are a lot of rules for students in my school that includes discipline, good grades, and maintaining attendance.
✓ Yes, there are a lot of rules for students in my school that include discipline, good grades, and maintaining attendance.
The verb 'includes' should be 'include' because it refers to the plural noun 'rules'. In English, when the subject is plural, the verb should not have an 's' ending. So, 'rules that include' is correct.
× Most importantly, these are rules that are suit UH that our institute has implemented in order to create a more disciplined environment.
✓ Most importantly, these are rules that suit our institute and have been implemented in order to create a more disciplined environment.
The phrase 'are suit UH that' is incorrect. The verb 'suit' does not need 'are' before it and 'UH' seems to be a filler or mistake. Also, the sentence structure is awkward. Correcting it to 'rules that suit our institute and have been implemented' makes it grammatically correct and clearer.
× she says that failures is failures in kitchen is what makes us more.
✓ she says that failures in the kitchen are what make us better.
The sentence has multiple issues: 'failures is failures' is incorrect; 'failures' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. Also, 'in kitchen' needs the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'what makes us more' is unclear; 'make us better' is more appropriate. So, the corrected sentence is 'failures in the kitchen are what make us better.'
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