Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide specific examples of rules. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to eat or drink in the classroom without the teacher's permission. Additionally, the school uniform must be worn properly, and shorts are not allowed. If students break these rules, they may face penalties such as being banned from certain activities.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to express your opinion clearly with a topic sentence, then support it with reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences to make your answer more effective.

例: I believe that having more rules can help students because it teaches them discipline and organization. For instance, following rules prepares them for future workplaces. However, too many rules might make students feel restricted, so a balance is important.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and linking words to connect your ideas. Provide specific details about why you like the teacher and how she helps you improve. Keep your answer clear and concise.

例: Yes, I have a favorite teacher named Tama who teaches accounting. I like her teaching style because she works hard and gives extra lessons. As a result, we improve in the subject and make sure we understand the material well.

× Yes, we have several rules, one of them that in the classrooms you you are not allowed to eat or drink without the teacher permission.

✓ Yes, we have several rules, one of them is that in the classrooms you are not allowed to eat or drink without the teacher's permission.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' to connect the clause and the possessive form 'teacher's' is needed to indicate permission belonging to the teacher.

× Yes, we have several rules, one of them that in the classrooms you you are not allowed to eat or drink without the teacher permission.

✓ Yes, we have several rules, one of them is that in the classrooms you are not allowed to eat or drink without the teacher's permission.

The word 'you' is repeated unnecessarily, which is a pronoun misuse causing redundancy.

× Also about the uniform, you have to make it long enough, not short.

✓ Also, about the uniform, you have to make it long enough, not short.

A comma is needed after 'Also' to separate introductory phrase for clarity.

× You will get banned if you break any rules of these.

✓ You will get banned if you break any of these rules.

The phrase 'any rules of these' is incorrect; it should be 'any of these rules' to properly use the definite article and preposition.

× I can't. I can't say that I'm between because if they follow the rules, they will be organized in the workplace or school.

✓ I can't say that I'm sure because if they follow the rules, they will be organized in the workplace or school.

The phrase 'I'm between' is unclear and incorrect; 'I'm sure' fits better. Also, 'I can't' repeated is unnecessary.

× But if they break it or there is less rules, each student will act like they want and that's not allowed because it's.

✓ But if they break it or there are fewer rules, each student will act like they want and that's not allowed because it is.

'Less rules' should be 'fewer rules' because 'rules' is countable. Also, 'there is' should be 'there are' to agree with plural 'rules'.

× But if they break it or there is less rules, each student will act like they want and that's not allowed because it's.

✓ But if they break the rules or if there are fewer rules, each student will act as they want, and that's not allowed because it is.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear at the end; it needs restructuring for clarity and completeness.

× Yes I have my favorite teacher she was teaching me accounting and her name is Tama.

✓ Yes, I have my favorite teacher; she teaches me accounting and her name is Tama.

The use of past tense 'was teaching' is incorrect because the teaching is ongoing; present tense 'teaches' is appropriate.

× I like her teaching way and because she work hard and take several lessons so we improve in her subject and make sure that we understand.

✓ I like her teaching style because she works hard and gives several lessons so we improve in her subject and make sure that we understand.

'Teaching way' should be 'teaching style'. 'She work' should be 'she works' for subject-verb agreement. 'Take several lessons' is incorrect; 'gives several lessons' fits better.