Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "no one roys her voice among the teacher." To improve, use clear and correct sentences, avoid repetition, and provide a concise list of rules with proper linking words.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to use their iPhones in the classroom, chewing gum is prohibited, and shouting is not permitted. Additionally, we must always speak respectfully to our teachers.

提案: Your answer is too brief and lacks explanation. To improve, provide reasons or examples to support your opinion and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from more rules because clear guidelines can help them develop discipline and good habits, which are important for their future careers.

提案: Your answer is short and contains grammatical mistakes. To improve, give a complete sentence with a topic sentence and supporting details, and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I have an English teacher who does her job very well. She is very experienced and always explains lessons clearly, which helps me understand the material better.

× No shouting and no, no one roys her voice among the teacher.

✓ No shouting and no one raises their voice to the teacher.

The original sentence contains a pronoun misuse and a spelling error. 'Roys' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'raises'. Also, 'her' is not appropriate here as the subject is indefinite ('no one'), so 'their' is used as a singular gender-neutral pronoun. Additionally, 'among the teacher' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'to the teacher'.

× Yes, I think it will affect their future.

✓ Yes, I think it would affect their future.

The question is hypothetical about whether students would benefit from more rules, so the conditional 'would' is more appropriate than the simple future 'will' to express this uncertainty or hypothetical situation.

× Yes, actually my English teacher, she's very successful person.

✓ Yes, actually my English teacher, she's a very successful person.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'very successful person'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article, so 'a' is necessary here.