Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'yeah' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, correct small mistakes such as 'self their cell phone' to 'their cell phones'. Provide a clear topic sentence and then add specific examples using linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to use their cell phones during class, and there are also strict guidelines about clothing and hairstyles to maintain discipline.

提案: Focus on clarity and accuracy in your answer. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'confirm to walls'. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I believe students would benefit from having more rules. For instance, rules help students develop discipline and understand the importance of following societal norms, which is essential for their future.

提案: Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid vague expressions like 'and stuff'. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific details or examples using linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I have had teachers who do their jobs very well. For example, some teachers are excellent at explaining difficult concepts clearly, and as a result, they are well-liked by most students.

× students are not allowed to use self their cell phone, uh, while class.

✓ students are not allowed to use their cell phones while in class.

The phrase 'self their cell phone' is incorrect. The reflexive pronoun 'self' is unnecessary here and 'cell phone' should be plural 'cell phones' to agree with the plural subject 'students'. Also, 'while class' should be 'while in class' to correctly express the time frame.

× students are not allowed to use self their cell phone, uh, while class.

✓ students are not allowed to use their cell phones while in class.

The preposition 'while' should be followed by 'in class' to indicate the time during which the action is prohibited. 'While class' is incorrect because 'class' is a noun and needs a preposition to show the relationship.

× there are rules about uh, clothing and hairstyle.

✓ there are rules about clothing and hairstyles.

The preposition 'about' is correctly used here, but 'hairstyle' should be plural 'hairstyles' to match the plural 'rules' and 'clothing' which is uncountable but refers to multiple items.

× students always need to follow rules. And with the rules in the schools, they can learn how to confirm, uh, to walls, and it's really important thing for them.

✓ students always need to follow rules. And with the rules in schools, they can learn how to conform to rules, and it's a really important thing for them.

The phrase 'confirm, uh, to walls' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'conform to rules'. Also, 'in the schools' should be 'in schools' as a general statement. 'It's really important thing' needs the article 'a' before 'really important thing'.

× And there were teachers who really are good at, who was really good at explaining things and stuff.

✓ And there were teachers who were really good at explaining things and stuff.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present 'are' and past 'was' tense and uses 'who' twice unnecessarily. The correct form is 'who were really good at explaining things' to maintain past tense and proper subject-verb agreement.

× And those teachers were mostly beloved by students.

✓ And those teachers were mostly beloved by students.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed.