Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや繰り返し（"by by"）があり、表現がやや不自然です。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、冗長さを避けることが必要です。例えば、"students' freedom"の所有格の使い方や、"think flexibly on their own"の表現を改善しましょう。

例: No, my school doesn't have any strict rules because it values students' freedom and encourages them to think independently.

提案: 回答は意見を述べていますが、文の構造が不自然で、句読点の使い方も改善が必要です。"try to. Not follow the rules"の部分は文法的に誤りで、より流暢な表現に直すべきです。接続詞を使って論理的に繋げ、明確な理由を示しましょう。

例: I don't think so because having too many rules can make students dislike them and try to break them. I believe it's more important for students to develop independent thinking skills.

提案: 回答は内容が具体的で良いですが、繰り返しが多く、文のつながりがやや単調です。"my English teacher"の繰り返しを避け、接続詞を使って文を滑らかに繋げるとより自然になります。

例: Yes, my English teacher does his job very well because he is kind and encouraging to everyone. Even when students make mistakes, he motivates them to keep improving.

× I think this is because my school is putting importance on students freedom and I think my school wants students to be able to think flexibly by by themselves.

✓ I think this is because my school is putting importance on students' freedom and I think my school wants students to be able to think flexibly by themselves.

The phrase 'putting importance on' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'putting importance on' but the possessive form 'students freedom' should be 'students' freedom' to show possession. Also, the repeated word 'by' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'by themselves'.

× This is because by having many rules, students tend to hate rules, and they try to. Not follow the rules, and I think the ability to think by themselves is really important.

✓ This is because by having many rules, students tend to hate rules, and they try not to follow the rules, and I think the ability to think by themselves is really important.

The sentence incorrectly splits 'try to not follow' into 'try to. Not follow', which is a punctuation and sentence structure error. The phrase should be 'try not to follow' without a period. Also, 'think by themselves' is acceptable but 'think for themselves' is more natural; however, since it is not in the problem list, it is left unchanged.