Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In English (Afghanistan), you should focus on using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. For example, use 'rules' instead of 'routes' and avoid repeating phrases like 'for the'. Also, try to make your answer more concise and clear by limiting it to 3-4 sentences and using linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, there are several important rules at my school. For instance, students must arrive on time for the morning assembly and be punctual for their first class. These rules help maintain discipline and ensure everyone is prepared for the day ahead.

提案: In English (Afghanistan), try to express your ideas clearly and avoid unclear phrases like 'wealth disciplines' or 'UMM to complete their stocks'. Use simple and correct vocabulary to explain your opinion. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I think students benefit from having more rules because rules help them become disciplined and motivated. For example, following rules teaches students to manage their time well, which is important for their future success.

提案: In English (Afghanistan), use correct relative pronouns like 'who' instead of 'which' for people. Also, avoid incorrect words like 'skull' when you mean 'skill'. Make your sentences clear and concise, and provide specific details about why the teacher is good using linking words.

例: Yes, I have a teacher who lives in New Delhi, India. His name is Karpal. He is very skilled and knowledgeable, which makes it easy for students to understand the lessons.

× Yes, there are several important routes for students in my school.

✓ Yes, there are several important rules for students in my school.

The word 'routes' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'rules' which refers to regulations or guidelines. 'Routes' means paths or ways, which does not fit the context.

× students must arrive on the time for the morning National Assembly

✓ students must arrive on time for the morning National Assembly

The phrase 'on the time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'on time' meaning punctuality. The article 'the' is unnecessary here.

× And these rules help maintain discipline and ensure that everyone is prepared for the for the day ahead.

✓ And these rules help maintain discipline and ensure that everyone is prepared for the day ahead.

The phrase 'for the for the day ahead' contains a repeated preposition 'for the'. Removing the duplicate corrects the sentence.

× And also they have mentioned for students.

✓ Also, these rules have been mentioned for students.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Rephrasing it to 'Also, these rules have been mentioned for students' makes it grammatically correct and clearer.

× Students benefit more from more rules because it makes them disciplined wealth disciplines and motivate them for UMM to complete their stocks on the times and to have many rules once make people or students very disciplined for father and future as well.

✓ Students benefit more from more rules because it makes them disciplined, helps develop good habits, and motivates them to complete their tasks on time. Having many rules makes students very disciplined for their present and future as well.

The original sentence contains many unclear and incorrect phrases such as 'wealth disciplines', 'UMM', 'stocks on the times', and 'father and future'. These are likely errors or mispronunciations. The correction clarifies the intended meaning using proper quantifiers and expressions.

× Yes, I have a teacher which is currently living in India, New Delhi, and his name is Karpal saying he is really well skillful and he's very capable and he has a skull and knowledge is very easy to pass.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher who is currently living in New Delhi, India, and his name is Karpal. He is very skillful and capable, and he has the knowledge that makes it easy to learn from him.

The pronoun 'which' is incorrectly used for a person; 'who' is correct. The phrase 'he has a skull' is incorrect; likely intended 'skill'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.