Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有语法错误和表达不自然的问题。建议使用正确的时态和单复数形式，避免重复表达，并且使句子更简洁自然。例如，'When I was in high school, there was a rule that girls couldn't keep long hair, so all the girls had to cut their hair short.'

例: When I was in high school, there was a rule that girls couldn't keep long hair, so all the girls had to cut their hair short.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用更准确的句子结构，避免模糊表达，并用连接词使句子更连贯。例如，'It depends on the type of rules. If the rules help create a good learning environment, they are beneficial. However, if the rules are just formalities without real purpose, they are not helpful.'

例: It depends on the type of rules. If the rules help create a good learning environment, they are beneficial. However, if the rules are just formalities without real purpose, they are not helpful.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题。建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，避免冗长，并使表达更流畅。例如，'Yes, most of my high school teachers did their jobs very well because they spent a lot of time with students. They stayed in their offices every night so students could ask questions.'

例: Yes, most of my high school teachers did their jobs very well because they spent a lot of time with students. They stayed in their offices every night so students could ask questions.

× Yes, I remember that when I was in my high school, there's a rule that the girls couldn't remain long hair, so every girls in the school were forced to cut their hair down into a short hair.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was in my high school, there was a rule that the girls couldn't keep long hair, so every girl in the school was forced to cut their hair short.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'there's' (there is) instead of 'there was' to match the past tense context. 'Girls' should be singular 'girl' to agree with 'every', which is singular. 'Remain long hair' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'keep' for hair length. 'Were' should be 'was' to agree with singular 'every girl'. 'Cut their hair down into a short hair' is awkward; 'cut their hair short' is the correct expression.

× Yes, I remember that when I was in my high school, there's a rule that the girls couldn't remain long hair, so every girls in the school were forced to cut their hair down into a short hair.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was in my high school, there was a rule that the girls couldn't keep long hair, so every girl in the school was forced to cut their hair short.

The phrase 'every girls' is incorrect because 'every' requires a singular noun; it should be 'every girl'. Also, 'girls' in 'the girls couldn't remain long hair' is plural but the verb phrase is awkward; 'keep long hair' is correct.

× Yes, I remember that when I was in my high school, there's a rule that the girls couldn't remain long hair, so every girls in the school were forced to cut their hair down into a short hair.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was in my high school, there was a rule that the girls couldn't keep long hair, so every girl in the school was forced to cut their hair short.

The verb 'remain' is incorrectly used with 'long hair'. The correct verb is 'keep' when referring to hair length. Also, 'cut their hair down into a short hair' is incorrect; 'cut their hair short' is the proper expression.

× Well, it depends on the kind of rules. If these rules are set to make sure that students have a good environment, that they are good. But if the rules just functions in some patterns, that's not good.

✓ Well, it depends on the kind of rules. If these rules are set to make sure that students have a good environment, then they are good. But if the rules just function in some patterns, that's not good.

The sentence lacks 'then' to complete the conditional structure. Also, 'rules just functions' is incorrect because 'rules' is plural and should be followed by 'function' without 's'.

× Well, it depends on the kind of rules. If these rules are set to make sure that students have a good environment, that they are good. But if the rules just functions in some patterns, that's not good.

✓ Well, it depends on the kind of rules. If these rules are set to make sure that students have a good environment, then they are good. But if the rules just function in some patterns, that's not good.

'Rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'function' not 'functions'. This is a subject-verb agreement error with third person singular.

× Yes, most of my teachers in high school were such kind of teachers who do their jobs very well because they spent a lot of time on students and every night they were waited in their office so that students can ask questions to.

✓ Yes, most of my teachers in high school were the kind of teachers who did their jobs very well because they spent a lot of time with students and every night they waited in their office so that students could ask questions.

The verb 'do' should be in past tense 'did' to match 'were'. 'Spent a lot of time on students' should be 'with students' for correct preposition. 'Were waited' is incorrect; the correct past tense is 'waited'. 'Students can ask questions to' is awkward; 'students could ask questions' is correct and 'to' is unnecessary.

× Yes, most of my teachers in high school were such kind of teachers who do their jobs very well because they spent a lot of time on students and every night they were waited in their office so that students can ask questions to.

✓ Yes, most of my teachers in high school were the kind of teachers who did their jobs very well because they spent a lot of time with students and every night they waited in their office so that students could ask questions.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'spent a lot of time'; the correct preposition is 'with'. Also, 'in their office' is correct, but 'were waited' is wrong; it should be 'waited'.