Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct prepositions and verb forms (e.g., 'it depends on' and 'I buy shoes'). Avoid repetition and filler sounds. Keep responses within 3–4 sentences and use a linking phrase like 'for example' to clarify.

例: I don't particularly enjoy buying shoes, but it depends on the type. For example, I buy running shoes about once a year because I use them often. For other types of shoes, I buy them much less frequently.

提案: Make your point clearly and avoid fragmented sentences. Start with a simple statement ('Yes, I often buy shoes online'), then give one clear reason and a brief example. Use correct phrasing (e.g., 'it's simpler' and 'I don't need to go to the store'). Avoid unclear fragments like 'washing time' or 'followed by their'.

例: Yes, I buy most of my shoes online because it's more convenient. I can compare styles and prices quickly and have them delivered to my home, which saves time.

提案: Give specific, realistic numbers and use correct currency expressions. Begin with a general statement, then give precise figures for different types of shoes. Avoid confusing or exaggerated amounts and incorrect grammar. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'typically' to structure your answer.

例: It depends on the type of shoes. For example, I usually spend around 5,000 to 8,000 rupees on a good pair of running shoes, but for casual shoes I might spend only 1,000 to 2,000 rupees.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason. Begin with a direct choice ('I prefer comfortable shoes') then explain briefly why, using coherent linking words ('because', 'so'). Avoid hesitation and repetition. Provide one short example of how comfort matters in daily life.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk and stand a lot every day. For instance, comfortable sneakers help me avoid foot pain after work, so practicality matters more than fashion for me.

× Actually, no, but no, no, I mean, it depends from what activity are you actually ask me because if you ask me about running shoes, so I would like to say that I often to buy shoes maybe just, uh, once in a year, but I don't think of it any other issues.

✓ Actually, no. I mean, it depends on what activity you are asking me about. If you ask me about running shoes, I would say that I often buy shoes maybe just once a year, but I don't think about it for other activities.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'depends from' should be 'depends on' (ID 11). Also the sentence had incorrect word order for the question phrase and unnecessary words but based on allowed types we correct preposition and related structure. 'Ask me' needs to be 'you are asking me' for correct tense and word order. 'Often to buy' is incorrect verb form — changed to 'often buy'. 'Once in a year' is non-idiomatic; use 'once a year'. Suggestion: use 'depends on', use continuous or simple present appropriately ('you are asking me about' or 'you ask me about'), and avoid extra filler words.

× Fun fact, most of my shoes are most of my shoes were bought online because I think it's just simple.

✓ Fun fact: most of my shoes were bought online because I think it's just simpler.

Errors: repetition and tense usage. The student mixed present 'are' with past 'were' (ID 6). The correct phrasing is past simple 'were bought' to describe a completed action. Also 'just simple' should be comparative 'simpler' to compare online shopping with alternatives. Suggestion: use past tense for completed purchases and use comparative form for preferences.

× I don't really need to go to shoe store to pick them and washing time I think and I don't really like to followed by their.

✓ I don't really need to go to the shoe store to pick them up, and it saves washing time, I think, plus I don't really like to be followed by salespeople there.

Errors: missing definite article 'the shoe store' (ID 17) and incorrect or missing particle 'pick them up' (phrasal verb). 'Washing time' is unclear; interpreted as 'it saves washing time' — rephrased. 'I don't really like to followed by their' mixes verb forms and pronoun; corrected to passive 'be followed by salespeople there'. Primary issue types: prepositions/phrasing and article use. Suggestion: include articles with specific nouns, use phrasal verbs correctly, and use correct passive construction 'be followed'.

× Yeah, it depends on what shows are you talking about to me, because if you talk about running shoes, so I would like to say that I just spent 1001 millions and for for hundreds rupees.

✓ Yeah, it depends on which shoes you are talking about, because if you talk about running shoes, I would say that I spent about 1000 rupees.

Errors: wrong pronoun/relative phrase 'what shows are you talking about to me' should be 'which shoes you are talking about' (ID 12). Also tense and number: 'I just spent' -> 'I spent' and unrealistic '1001 millions and for for hundreds rupees' corrected to a plausible figure 'about 1000 rupees'. Suggestion: use 'which' for choices among items, correct word order for embedded questions, and state amounts clearly.

× But if you ask me about any other shoes, I just spend with six.

✓ But if you ask me about other types of shoes, I usually spend about six hundred rupees.

Errors: unclear structure 'I just spend with six' is not grammatical (ID 26). Corrected to 'I usually spend about six hundred rupees' to match intended meaning. Suggestion: use adverbs of frequency ('usually'), proper quantifiers ('about'), and write numbers in a clear form with the appropriate currency and units.

× If I can do both, why not? But if you ask me to choose only one. So I would like to say that comfortable more uh fish more preferred to me because comfort is above of above the fashion.

✓ If I can have both, why not? But if you ask me to choose only one, I would say that comfortable shoes are more preferred by me because comfort is above fashion.

Errors: sentence fragments and incorrect verb forms. 'If you ask me to choose only one.' is a fragment; merged into one sentence. 'Comfortable more uh fish more preferred to me' is garbled: corrected to 'comfortable shoes are more preferred by me' (ID 8 for gerund misuse and ID 26 for structure). Also 'above of above the fashion' incorrect preposition/article — corrected to 'above fashion'. Suggestion: avoid fillers, ensure complete sentences, use correct adjective-noun order ('comfortable shoes'), and use 'preferred by me' or simply 'I prefer comfortable shoes'.

× I just I need comfort in my daily life.

✓ I just need comfort in my daily life.

Minor redundancy: removed duplicated 'I'. Primary issue was repetition and minor fluency (ID 13). Suggestion: proofread to remove repeated words and keep sentences concise.