Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'library is near to my house' 대신 'the library is near my house'가 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장 연결이 부자연스러우므로 연결어를 사용해 보완하세요.

例: Yes, I go to the library twice a week because the library is near my house. When I take a walk or go to the office, I usually stop by the library to read books.

提案: 답변이 길고 중복된 단어('period period')가 있습니다. 문장을 명확하게 나누고 연결어를 사용해 보세요. 또한, 'study my exams' 대신 'study for my exams'가 올바른 표현입니다.

例: Well, it depends. During the exam period, I usually go to the library to study for my exams. On regular days, I go there to read and borrow books.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 'came concerts'와 'rivalry'는 문맥에 맞지 않는 단어입니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 다시 구성하세요.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a kid, there were no phones or concerts nearby, so I often went to the library to meet and play with my friends.

提案: 답변에 문법 오류가 있고, 표현이 어색합니다. 'prepare to using smartphone' 대신 'prefer using smartphones'가 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

例: Well, I don't think so. Nowadays, many children prefer using smartphones to chat with their friends rather than going to the library.

× Yes, I go to the library twice a week because library is near to my house.

✓ Yes, I go to the library twice a week because the library is near my house.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific library known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'near to' is incorrect; 'near' should be used without 'to'.

× Yes, I go to the library twice a week because library is near to my house.

✓ Yes, I go to the library twice a week because the library is near my house.

The preposition 'to' is unnecessary after 'near'. The correct phrase is 'near my house', not 'near to my house'.

× When I take a walk and go to office, I usually go to library and read books.

✓ When I take a walk and go to the office, I usually go to the library and read books.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'office' and 'library' because they refer to specific places known to the speaker.

× When I take a walk and go to office, I usually go to library and read books.

✓ When I take a walk and go to the office, I usually go to the library and read books.

The preposition 'to' is correctly used before 'office' and 'library', but the article 'the' is missing, which is necessary here.

× Well it depends during the exam period period I usually go to library to study my exams but in other case in common day I usually go to library to read and borrow books.

✓ Well, it depends. During the exam period, I usually go to the library to study for my exams, but on other days, I usually go to the library to read and borrow books.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. Also, 'period period' is a repetition error. 'In other case in common day' is awkward and should be 'on other days'. Articles 'the' are missing before 'library'.

× Well it depends during the exam period period I usually go to library to study my exams but in other case in common day I usually go to library to read and borrow books.

✓ Well, it depends. During the exam period, I usually go to the library to study for my exams, but on other days, I usually go to the library to read and borrow books.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place.

× I should say yes. This is because when I was a kid there were no phones and came concerts so in order to meet my friends and play with my friends so I usually went to rivalry.

✓ I should say yes. This is because when I was a kid, there were no phones and no concerts, so in order to meet and play with my friends, I usually went to the library.

The phrase 'came concerts' is incorrect; it should be 'no concerts'. 'Rivalry' is incorrect and should be 'library'. Also, commas are needed for clarity. The past tense 'went' is correct.

× I should say yes. This is because when I was a kid there were no phones and came concerts so in order to meet my friends and play with my friends so I usually went to rivalry.

✓ I should say yes. This is because when I was a kid, there were no phones and no concerts, so in order to meet and play with my friends, I usually went to the library.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library' as it refers to a specific place.

× I should say yes. This is because when I was a kid there were no phones and came concerts so in order to meet my friends and play with my friends so I usually went to rivalry.

✓ I should say yes. This is because when I was a kid, there were no phones and no concerts, so in order to meet and play with my friends, I usually went to the library.

Repetition of 'my friends' is redundant; it can be simplified to 'meet and play with my friends'.

× I should say yes.

✓ I would say yes.

'Would' is more appropriate here to express a polite or tentative affirmation rather than 'should', which implies obligation.

× Well, I don't think so. First, I think in recent days children usually prepare to using smartphone and use it to chat with friends.

✓ Well, I don't think so. First, I think these days children usually use smartphones to chat with friends.

'Prepare to using' is incorrect; it should be 'use'. Also, 'smartphone' should be plural 'smartphones' when speaking generally. 'In recent days' is better expressed as 'these days'.

× Well, I don't think so. First, I think in recent days children usually prepare to using smartphone and use it to chat with friends.

✓ Well, I don't think so. First, I think these days children usually use smartphones to chat with friends.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used before 'using'; the correct form is 'use' without 'to'.