Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy like "so so so very good" and use proper verb forms. Try to give a clear topic sentence and then support it with specific details. For example, mention what types of books you like and why you find the library useful.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading different kinds of books. It is a great place to find information and improve my knowledge on various subjects.

提案: Your answer is short and lacks linking words and specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details using linking words like 'for example' or 'such as'. Also, try to use more natural phrases like 'reference books' instead of 'dictionary books'.

例: In the library, I usually read journals and reference books because it is a quiet environment that helps me concentrate better.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear meaning. Use past tense when talking about childhood. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid run-on sentences and improve coherence with linking words.

例: No, I did not go to the library often when I was a kid because I was more interested in playing outside. Besides, we had many books at home, so I did not feel the need to visit the library.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases like 'other activities'. Also, be careful with sentence structure and verb forms. Provide a clear opinion supported by reasons.

例: I think not all Chinese kids often go to the library because many prefer playing games or engaging in other activities. However, some children do visit the library regularly to study or read.

× Yes, I go to the library frequently where I reading all type of books which I want to read.

✓ Yes, I go to the library frequently where I read all types of books which I want to read.

The verb 'reading' is incorrectly used after 'I' without an auxiliary verb. The correct form is the base verb 'read' to match the simple present tense. Also, 'all type of books' should be plural as 'all types of books' to agree in number.

× Yes, I go to the library frequently where I reading all type of books which I want to read.

✓ Yes, I go to the library frequently where I read all types of books which I want to read.

The phrase 'all type of books' is incorrect because 'type' should be plural 'types' when referring to multiple categories. This is a quantifier agreement issue.

× It's so so so very good to information that I borrow books and get knowledge from it.

✓ It's so very good for information that I borrow books and get knowledge from them.

The phrase 'to information' is incorrect; the preposition 'for' is appropriate here. Also, 'it' refers to 'books' which is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them'.

× It's so so so very good to information that I borrow books and get knowledge from it.

✓ It's so very good for information that I borrow books and get knowledge from them.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'information'; the correct preposition is 'for' to indicate purpose or benefit.

× It's a quiet environment, so I read all the journals and the dictionary books which I want to read.

✓ It's a quiet environment, so I read all the journals and dictionary books which I want to read.

The phrase 'the dictionary books' is awkward; 'dictionary books' without 'the' is more natural. Also, 'which I want to read' is acceptable but could be simplified.

× No, I don't go to the library whenever I will get because I don't interest in library when I'm a kid.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library whenever I could because I wasn't interested in the library when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present and future tenses incorrectly. 'Don't go' should be past tense 'didn't go' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'Will get' is incorrect here; 'could' fits better. 'Don't interest' should be 'wasn't interested' to express past state.

× No, I don't go to the library whenever I will get because I don't interest in library when I'm a kid.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library whenever I could because I wasn't interested in the library when I was a kid.

The preposition 'in' is missing after 'interested'. The correct phrase is 'interested in'.

× My interest in playing outside games and at home there are a lot of books.

✓ My interest was in playing outdoor games, and at home there were a lot of books.

The sentence refers to past time ('when I was a kid'), so past tense 'was' and 'were' should be used. Also, 'outside games' is better expressed as 'outdoor games'.

× No, not all kids are going to library because many of other kids are interesting in other activities like playing games and other activities.

✓ No, not all kids go to the library because many other kids are interested in other activities like playing games and other activities.

'Going to library' should be 'go to the library' for habitual action and correct article usage. 'Many of other kids' is incorrect; it should be 'many other kids'. 'Interesting' should be 'interested' to describe the kids' feelings.

× No, not all kids are going to library because many of other kids are interesting in other activities like playing games and other activities.

✓ No, not all kids go to the library because many other kids are interested in other activities like playing games and other activities.

The phrase 'interesting in' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'interested in'.

× So I think no, every kid can go to library.

✓ So I think no, not every kid can go to the library.

The sentence is missing 'not' to express the negative meaning properly. Also, 'go to library' should be 'go to the library' with the definite article.