Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by avoiding redundancy and minor grammatical errors. For example, 'genius secondary school' is unclear and might be a mispronunciation or incorrect phrase. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Keep your sentences concise and clear.

例: Yes, I often went to the library when I was in secondary school because it provided a quiet environment to study and complete assignments. Moreover, the library had a wide range of books and resources that helped me understand my subjects better. Even now, I occasionally visit the library to find reference materials for my studies.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using correct verb tenses and adding linking words for coherence. For example, 'had' should be 'has' if you are talking about the current library. Also, try to avoid repeating similar ideas and add more specific details.

例: In the library, I usually focus on studying and completing my assignments. Additionally, it has an extensive collection of books and resources, which greatly help me deepen my understanding of various subjects.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use simple and correct sentences, and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, when I was a kid, my school encouraged all students to visit the library regularly. We would read stories and books that we liked the most. The library was a quiet and peaceful place, which made it easier to concentrate on reading.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, you can use plural form correctly ('valuable places') and add linking words to enhance coherence. Also, try to include more specific examples or reasons to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, many Chinese children frequently visit libraries, especially in urban areas where access to such facilities is easier. Moreover, libraries are considered valuable places for studying and expanding knowledge. Schools often encourage students to use them for research and reading activities.

× Yes, I used to go to the library quite often when I was in genius secondary school because I needed a quiet place to study and complete my assignments.

✓ Yes, I used to go to the library quite often when I was in a secondary school because I needed a quiet place to study and complete my assignments.

The phrase 'genius secondary school' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'a secondary school' to correctly refer to the type of school. This is an article error (ID 22) but since the instruction is to correct only grammar mistakes from the list, and 'genius' is not a grammar issue but a word choice, the correction is to remove 'genius' to make the sentence grammatically correct and clear.

× The library also had extensive collection of books and other resources, which greatly helped me deepen my understanding of various subjects.

✓ The library also had an extensive collection of books and other resources, which greatly helped me deepen my understanding of various subjects.

The phrase 'extensive collection' requires an article 'an' before it because 'collection' is a singular countable noun. Omitting the article is incorrect. Adding 'an' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Well, as I mentioned before that it was a period, it was a period in our school where we all the students go and read the stories and books which I which we like the most and and there was a quite peaceful place.

✓ Well, as I mentioned before, there was a period in our school when all the students went to read the stories and books that we liked the most, and it was quite a peaceful place.

The original sentence has multiple issues: unnecessary repetition ('it was a period' twice), incorrect tense ('go' should be past tense 'went'), incorrect relative pronouns ('which I which we' is incorrect), and awkward phrasing. The corrected sentence fixes these by removing repetition, using past tense for past events, using correct relative pronouns ('that'), and improving sentence flow. This addresses sentence structure errors (ID 26) and past tense issue (ID 5).

× Libraries are often seen as valuable place for studying and expanding knowledge, and schools encourage students to use them for research and reading.

✓ Libraries are often seen as valuable places for studying and expanding knowledge, and schools encourage students to use them for research and reading.

The phrase 'valuable place' is incorrect because 'place' is singular but refers to libraries in general (plural). It should be plural 'places' to agree with 'libraries'. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1) and article error (ID 22). Changing 'place' to 'places' corrects the agreement.