Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it contains filler words like "umm" which reduce the natural flow. Try to avoid fillers and keep your sentences concise and direct. Also, you could add a linking phrase to connect your ideas more smoothly.

例: Yes, I go there very often because I enjoy the tranquil atmosphere it provides, which makes it a great place to concentrate on my work and study.

提案: Your answer is somewhat fragmented and contains an unclear phrase "concentrate on Taipei" which seems out of context. Try to form complete sentences and avoid unclear or irrelevant words. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I usually read books there, but I also sometimes bring my laptop to do research or watch videos online because the library is a quiet and focused environment.

提案: Your answer is detailed and relevant, but it is a bit long and could be divided into two sentences for clarity. Also, watch for minor grammar issues such as "much opportunities" which should be "many opportunities."

例: Unfortunately, I didn't have many opportunities to go to a well-equipped library when I was a kid. I was born and raised in mainland China, and back in the 90s, many libraries were poorly equipped and only accessible to a limited group of people.

提案: Your answer repeats information from the previous question and lacks a direct response to whether Chinese kids often go to the library. Try to answer the question directly and add specific details or examples. Also, correct "poor equipped" to "poorly equipped."

例: In general, many Chinese kids did not often go to libraries in the 90s because most libraries were poorly equipped and not easily accessible to the public.

× I didn't have much opportunities to go to a well equipped library when I was a kid because I was born and raised in mainland China and back in the 90s a lot of the libraries there were poorly equipped and only accessible to a certain group of limited people.

✓ I didn't have many opportunities to go to a well-equipped library when I was a kid because I was born and raised in mainland China and back in the 90s a lot of the libraries there were poorly equipped and only accessible to a certain group of limited people.

The phrase 'much opportunities' is incorrect because 'opportunities' is a countable noun and should be used with 'many' instead of 'much'. 'Much' is used with uncountable nouns. Also, 'well equipped' should be hyphenated as 'well-equipped' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× a lot of the libraries there were poor equipped and only accessible to a group of people.

✓ a lot of the libraries there were poorly equipped and only accessible to a group of people.

The adjective 'poor' is incorrectly used to modify 'equipped'. The correct form is the adverb 'poorly' because it modifies the verb 'equipped'. Adjectives cannot modify verbs; adverbs should be used instead.