Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific supporting details using linking words to make your answer coherent and natural. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

例: No, I don't go to the library often nowadays. However, during my graduation, I used to visit the library regularly to borrow reference books. Now, I prefer buying books online from Flipkart or Amazon because I love reading at my own pace.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and repeating phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more specific details about why you like the book to make your answer more engaging and natural.

例: In the library, I usually read books, especially motivational ones. For example, I really enjoy 'The Power of Your Subconscious Mind' by Dr. Joseph Murphy because it offers practical techniques to improve mental well-being.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains unnecessary fillers and repetitions. Try to give a clear and concise response with a topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. Avoid phrases like 'you know' and keep your answer structured and natural.

例: No, I didn't visit a library as a child because my school didn't have one. However, I always imagined going to a library since I love reading books.

提案: Your answer does not directly address the question and ends abruptly. It's better to acknowledge your lack of knowledge politely and then provide a related opinion or general statement to keep the conversation going. Use complete sentences and avoid trailing off.

例: I am not sure about whether Chinese kids often go to the library. However, speaking about Indian children, many of them do visit libraries regularly to study and read books.

× Yes, I remember that day when I when I was in my graduation.

✓ Yes, I remember that day when I was in my graduation.

The repetition of 'when I' is unnecessary and incorrect. Removing the repeated phrase makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× So I used to go to the library for books, for references books.

✓ So I used to go to the library for books, for reference books.

The phrase 'references books' is incorrect; the correct term is 'reference books' without the plural 'references' as an adjective.

× But now I however I love to read books, so I bought from Flipkart Amazon.

✓ But now, however, I love to read books, so I buy them from Flipkart and Amazon.

The sentence has awkward structure and tense inconsistency. 'Bought' is past tense but the context is present habit, so 'buy' is appropriate. Also, 'Flipkart Amazon' should be 'Flipkart and Amazon' to correctly list the two sources.

× I read books in the library.

✓ I read books at the library.

The preposition 'at' is more appropriate when referring to a place where an activity happens, such as 'at the library' rather than 'in the library' in this context.

× One of them, one of my favorite books is The Power of Your Subconscious Mind that is written by Doctor Joseph Murphy and uh, in this book, I just fell in love with this book.

✓ One of them, one of my favorite books, is The Power of Your Subconscious Mind, which is written by Doctor Joseph Murphy, and I just fell in love with this book.

The sentence needs commas for clarity and 'that is written' is better replaced with 'which is written' for non-restrictive clause. Also, 'in this book' is redundant and can be removed for smoother flow.

× No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because in my school there was no library, so I didn't get a chance to go there.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because my school didn't have a library, so I didn't get a chance to go there.

The phrase 'in my school there was no library' is awkward; 'my school didn't have a library' is clearer and more natural in English.

× But in my imagination, I just wanted to go there.

✓ But in my imagination, I just wanted to go there.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× As I am Indian so I don't know about that Chinese kids go to the library or not.

✓ As I am Indian, I don't know whether Chinese kids go to the library or not.

The phrase 'about that Chinese kids go' is incorrect. It should be 'whether Chinese kids go' to correctly express uncertainty. Also, a comma after 'Indian' improves sentence clarity.

× So I cannot give suggestion on it or I cannot describe this situation but according to me if I talk about Indian people so Indian.

✓ So I cannot give a suggestion on it or describe this situation, but according to me, if I talk about Indian people...

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Give suggestion' should be 'give a suggestion'. Also, 'according to me' is better followed by a comma. The sentence should be completed for clarity.