Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to keep your response concise and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it provides a quiet and comfortable environment for studying. Moreover, I can focus better there, which helps me complete my homework efficiently.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and is a bit unclear. Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid repeating phrases. Also, organise your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: I usually study in the library because it has free Wi-Fi, which allows me to access the internet and complete my assignments efficiently.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and is somewhat confusing. Use the correct past tense forms and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

例: No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because I was not interested in reading at that time. I only developed a hobby for books recently.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to express your uncertainty clearly and avoid repeating words. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your answer coherent. Also, complete your sentences fully.

例: I'm not sure about that because I am an Indian and not familiar with Chinese culture. However, I think that like children everywhere, some Chinese kids probably go to the library to study.

× I feel pretty comfortable there for learning my subjects and for usually getting my homeworks done, and the atmosphere there is so pleasing because of the silence.

✓ I feel pretty comfortable there for learning my subjects and for usually getting my homework done, and the atmosphere there is so pleasing because of the silence.

The word 'homeworks' is incorrect because 'homework' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Use 'homework' instead of 'homeworks'. This is a common mistake with uncountable nouns in English.

× And it's a pretty good place to.

✓ And it's a pretty good place too.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'to' which is incorrect. The intended word is 'too' meaning 'also'. This is a sentence structure error where the wrong word is used, causing the sentence to be incomplete or incorrect.

× Usually I used to study in the library and quite a few times I also done my work there because in the nearest library of my in the nearest library near to my house, there is free Wi-Fi so that I can get a stable Internet connection and get my works done.

✓ Usually I used to study in the library and quite a few times I also did my work there because in the nearest library near my house, there is free Wi-Fi so that I can get a stable Internet connection and get my work done.

The phrase 'I also done my work' is incorrect because 'done' is the past participle and requires an auxiliary verb 'have' to form the present perfect tense. Since the sentence is in past tense, 'did' should be used instead of 'done'. Also, 'works' should be 'work' as 'work' is uncountable here. Additionally, the phrase 'in the nearest library of my in the nearest library near to my house' is redundant and awkward; it should be simplified to 'in the nearest library near my house'.

× No, I don't, uh, I don't go to the library when I was a kid because I am not much into the books.

✓ No, I didn't, uh, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because I was not much into books.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't go' with past time 'when I was a kid'. The correct past tense form is 'didn't go'. Also, 'I am not much into the books' should be 'I was not much into books' to match the past time frame and because 'books' here is plural without 'the'.

× So I think that I I did not went to library when I was a kid.

✓ So I think that I did not go to the library when I was a kid.

After 'did not', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'went' is incorrect; it should be 'go'. Also, 'to library' needs the definite article 'the' before 'library'.

× I'm not pretty sure about it because I'm an Indian, Indian citizen so that I'm not familiar with the Chinese culture or Chinese situation which their kids grew up in.

✓ I'm not pretty sure about it because I'm an Indian citizen, so I'm not familiar with Chinese culture or the Chinese situation in which their kids grew up.

The phrase 'which their kids grew up in' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'in which their kids grew up' to correctly relate the relative clause to 'situation'. Also, 'Indian, Indian citizen' is redundant; 'Indian citizen' suffices.

× So I think that as every students or kids, they also may be going to.

✓ So I think that, like every student or kid, they may also be going to the library.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'As every students or kids' is incorrect because 'students' and 'kids' are plural but 'every' requires singular noun. It should be 'like every student or kid'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'going to' without specifying where. Adding 'the library' completes the thought.