Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、文が長くなりすぎており、冗長な表現が見られます。より簡潔に、かつ論理的に答えるために、文を分けて話す練習をしましょう。また、接続詞を適切に使い、内容を整理すると良いです。

例: I don't often go to the library because I rarely read books. Instead, I prefer outdoor activities like playing football or tennis since I really love sports.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で、文法的な誤りや曖昧な表現（"fantasies and stuff"）があります。具体的な語彙を使い、文を完結にし、明確に答えることを心がけましょう。

例: I usually read fictional stories in the library because I enjoy imaginative and creative books more than factual articles.

提案: 回答は内容が豊富ですが、話し言葉の曖昧な表現（"Hum"）や冗長な部分があります。より自然で簡潔な表現を使い、接続詞で論理的に繋げる練習をしましょう。

例: I don't clearly remember, but I think I used to go to the library more often as a child because my parents encouraged me to read books. Also, I wanted to improve my English skills, so I read every day.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多く、内容も繰り返しが多いです。質問に直接答え、簡潔で明確な文を作る練習をしましょう。また、不要な繰り返しを避け、論理的に話を展開することが重要です。

例: I'm not very familiar with Chinese children, but I believe they often go to libraries because China has many libraries and a strong reading culture.

× I am a outdoor person so instead I prefer going outside such as parks and play football or play tennis because I really love playing sports.

✓ I am an outdoor person, so instead I prefer going outside to places such as parks and playing football or tennis because I really love playing sports.

'a outdoor person' should be 'an outdoor person' because 'outdoor' starts with a vowel sound. Also, 'going outside such as parks' is incorrect; it should be 'going outside to places such as parks'. Additionally, parallel structure requires 'playing football or playing tennis' or 'playing football or tennis'. Here, 'playing football or tennis' is more natural.

× I am a outdoor person so instead I prefer going outside such as parks and play football or play tennis because I really love playing sports.

✓ I am an outdoor person, so instead I prefer going outside to places such as parks and playing football or tennis because I really love playing sports.

The phrase 'play football or play tennis' should be parallel and consistent in form. Using 'playing football or tennis' maintains parallelism and is grammatically correct.

× Well, I usually read fictional stories because rather than reading documents and non fictional articles, I enjoy reading fantasies and. Stuff.

✓ Well, I usually read fictional stories because, rather than reading documents and non-fictional articles, I enjoy reading fantasies and similar stuff.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'fantasies and. Stuff.' which is incomplete and incorrect. It should be 'fantasies and similar stuff' to complete the thought properly.

× Well, I usually read fictional stories because rather than reading documents and non fictional articles, I enjoy reading fantasies and. Stuff.

✓ Well, I usually read fictional stories because, rather than reading documents and non-fictional articles, I enjoy reading fantasies and similar stuff.

The term 'non fictional' should be hyphenated as 'non-fictional' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× Hum I don't really remember but I think I used to go a lot even more than now because my parents forced me to read books and also I felt like I wanted to improve my English skills so I read books every day.

✓ Hmm, I don't really remember, but I think I used to go a lot, even more than now, because my parents forced me to read books and also I felt like I wanted to improve my English skills, so I read books every day.

The sentence is mostly correct in tense usage, but adding commas improves clarity. 'Used to go' correctly indicates past habitual action.

× Because I'm Japanese, I'm not familiar with Chinese kids, but I think they do because Chinese there are in Chinese.

✓ Because I'm Japanese, I'm not familiar with Chinese kids, but I think they do because Chinese people there are in China.

The phrase 'Chinese there are in Chinese' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'Chinese people there are in China' to clarify the meaning.

× In China, there are many libraries, bookstores and libraries.

✓ In China, there are many libraries and bookstores.

The phrase 'libraries, bookstores and libraries' repeats 'libraries' unnecessarily. It should be corrected to avoid redundancy.

× And it is China is also famous for reading books, so I think they often do read books and go to library.

✓ China is also famous for reading books, so I think they often read books and go to the library.

The sentence has redundant and incorrect structure 'And it is China is'. It should be simplified to 'China is'. Also, 'go to library' requires the definite article 'the' before 'library'.