Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 주제에 직접적으로 답하는 문장으로 시작하세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books.'와 같이 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books. Since high school, I have mostly read action novels there. I find the quiet environment perfect for concentrating on my reading.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 완성되지 않았습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 현재와 과거 활동을 명확히 구분하여 설명하세요. 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어가는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Currently, I usually listen to music and browse websites when I am in the library. However, when I was in high school, I used the library mainly for studying and doing schoolwork.

提案: 중복된 단어와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 만들고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I often visited the library during my school vacations because my uncle worked there.'와 같이 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: Yes, I often visited the library when I was a kid because my uncle had worked there for many years. During my school vacations, I usually spent time there reading books.

提案: 답변이 불완전하고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 모르는 부분은 솔직히 말하되, 자신의 의견을 명확하고 간결하게 표현하세요. 비교할 때는 구체적인 이유를 덧붙여 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: I'm not sure, but I think Chinese kids often go to the library because their education system is very competitive. They need to study hard, so libraries are important places for them to learn.

× I think so because I love read a book and since I'm in high school I've been reading action books like 3 times in my whole life because my various literature and.

✓ I think so because I love reading books and since I'm in high school I've been reading action books about 3 times in my whole life because of my various literature interests.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund form 'reading' instead of the base form 'read'. Also, 'a book' should be plural 'books' to match the context. The phrase 'because my various literature and' is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to 'because of my various literature interests' for clarity.

× To be honest, currently I'm not doing school thing in a in the library.

✓ To be honest, currently I'm not doing school work in the library.

The phrase 'doing school thing' is incorrect; it should be 'doing school work'. Also, the preposition 'in a in the library' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'in the library'.

× I usually do listen to music and go to websites to search something like I like it, but when I was high school I used.

✓ I usually listen to music and go to websites to search for something I like, but when I was in high school I used to.

The phrase 'do listen' is incorrect; 'listen' alone is sufficient. 'Search something' should be 'search for something'. The phrase 'when I was high school' is missing the preposition 'in'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'I used', which should be 'I used to' to indicate past habitual action.

× Yes, because my uncle uncle had been working there for like 8 years and when I when I vacation of high school I usually go to there.

✓ Yes, because my uncle had been working there for about 8 years and when I was on vacation from high school I usually went there.

The repeated word 'uncle uncle' is an error and should be corrected to 'uncle'. The phrase 'when I vacation of high school' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was on vacation from high school'. The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past context. The phrase 'go to there' is incorrect; it should be 'went there'.

× That's an interesting question. I don't know really about this much, but I think yes, because comparing to Mongolian education system, the Chinese education system is more crucial in their life and their since the Chinese kid since they are.

✓ That's an interesting question. I don't really know much about this, but I think yes, because compared to the Mongolian education system, the Chinese education system is more crucial in their lives, and since Chinese kids are...

The phrase 'I don't know really about this much' is awkward; it should be 'I don't really know much about this'. 'Comparing to' should be 'compared to'. 'Mongolian education system' and 'Chinese education system' need definite articles: 'the Mongolian education system' and 'the Chinese education system'. 'In their life' should be plural 'in their lives'. The phrase 'their since the Chinese kid since they are' is incomplete and unclear; corrected to 'and since Chinese kids are...' to indicate continuation.