Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You should try to make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of repeating similar ideas about why you prefer studying at home, focus on one clear reason and expand it with a specific detail. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I don't often go to the library because it tends to be crowded, which makes it hard to concentrate. Therefore, I prefer studying at home where I have all the materials I need and a quiet environment.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical errors. You should complete your sentences and use correct verb forms. Also, avoid repetition and add linking words to make your answer coherent. Provide specific examples of activities you did in the library.

例: When I was a university student, I usually went to the library to finish my homework and sometimes to take breaks. The library was spacious, with different areas for studying and relaxing, which made it a pleasant place to spend time.

提案: Pay attention to verb tenses and agreement (e.g., 'spent' instead of 'spend', 'played' instead of 'play'). Also, try to make your answer more concise and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Not really. When I was a child, I usually spent time at my grandma's house where I did my homework, played games, and read books. I preferred that because it was more comfortable and convenient for both me and my parents.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains unclear phrases like 'great servants' and 'simulate a lot of'. Avoid vague statements and try to provide a clear, complete answer. Use linking words and specific reasons to support your opinion.

例: I'm not very familiar with Chinese culture, but from what I've seen in movies, Chinese kids often go to the library because there is a lot of academic pressure to succeed. Therefore, they spend time studying in quiet places like libraries.

× Also, at home I have all materials that I need to study.

✓ Also, at home I have all the materials that I need to study.

The word 'materials' is plural and requires the definite article 'the' to specify the particular materials needed. Without 'the', the sentence sounds incomplete or incorrect in English.

× When I was at university student, I used to go to the library to finish homework, to take a break and sometimes to hang out with friends.

✓ When I was a university student, I used to go to the library to finish homework, to take a break and sometimes to hang out with friends.

The phrase 'at university student' is incorrect. The correct form is 'a university student' to indicate the role or status during that time. Also, 'used to' correctly indicates past habitual actions.

× It was big enough to have different different areas so you was able to.

✓ It was big enough to have different areas so you were able to.

The subject 'you' requires the verb 'were' in past tense, not 'was'. Also, the repetition of 'different' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'different'.

× Not really, when I was a child I usually spend time at my grandmas house where I did my homework, play games and read books instead of going to the library.

✓ Not really, when I was a child I usually spent time at my grandma's house where I did my homework, played games and read books instead of going to the library.

The verbs 'spend' and 'play' should be in past tense 'spent' and 'played' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was a child'. Also, 'grandmas' should be possessive 'grandma's' to indicate ownership.

× I prefer being at home or visiting my relatives because it was more comfortable and convenient for me and for my parents.

✓ I preferred being at home or visiting my relatives because it was more comfortable and convenient for me and for my parents.

Since the sentence refers to past preferences, 'prefer' should be in past tense 'preferred' to maintain tense consistency. The preposition 'at' is correctly used here.

× Actually, I'm not quite sure about that because I'm not too close to the Chinese culture, but based on what I have seen in the movies, I would say yes, because they have a lot of pressure to become great servants and to simulate a lot of.

✓ Actually, I'm not quite sure about that because I'm not very familiar with Chinese culture, but based on what I have seen in movies, I would say yes, because they have a lot of pressure to become great students and to simulate a lot of things.

The phrase 'not too close to the Chinese culture' is awkward; 'not very familiar with Chinese culture' is more natural. 'In the movies' should be 'in movies' for general reference. 'Great servants' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'great students' fits context better. The sentence ends abruptly; 'simulate a lot of' is incomplete and should be 'simulate a lot of things' or similar to complete the thought.