Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, đồng thời câu trả lời không rõ ràng và hơi mâu thuẫn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như "really" nhiều lần và sắp xếp câu rõ ràng hơn.

例: I don't often go to the library because I find it a bit boring, but sometimes I visit to borrow some books.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và tránh dùng từ không chính xác như "read chat". Hãy cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về hoạt động của bạn trong thư viện.

例: When I go to the library, I usually borrow comic books to read. Sometimes, I also use my phone to relax, but I try to focus on reading.

提案: Bạn trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, bạn nên dùng câu liên kết để làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, when I was a kid, I often went to the library with my parents. They introduced me to many books I had never known before, so I really loved the library back then. However, I don't enjoy going there anymore.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không trực tiếp và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp như "improvise". Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và tránh nói rằng câu hỏi là "personal" khi không cần thiết.

例: I believe Chinese kids often go to the library because their exams are very challenging, so they need to study hard and use the library as a quiet place to review their lessons.

× As I really go to the library, so the time I go to the library I just play with my phones.

✓ Since I really go to the library, the times I go there I just play with my phone.

The original sentence incorrectly uses both 'As' and 'so' together, which is redundant. Use either 'As' or 'Since' to indicate reason, and remove 'so'. Also, 'phones' should be singular 'phone' when referring to a single device.

× I just play with my phones.

✓ I just play with my phone.

The word 'phones' is plural, but usually a person uses one phone at a time. Therefore, the singular form 'phone' is appropriate here.

× They introduced to me a lot of books that I had never known before.

✓ They introduced me to a lot of books that I had never known before.

The verb 'introduce' is followed by the person first and then the thing introduced, so the correct structure is 'introduced me to' not 'introduced to me'.

× So at that time I really love library.

✓ So at that time I really loved the library.

The sentence refers to a past time, so the verb should be in the past tense 'loved'. Also, 'library' should have the definite article 'the'.

× So at that time I really love library.

✓ So at that time I really loved the library.

When referring to a specific place like 'library' in this context, the definite article 'the' is required.

× But now I I didn't like it.

✓ But now I don't like it.

The sentence talks about the present, so the verb should be in the present tense 'don't like' instead of past tense 'didn't like'.

× maybe to me, Chinese kids might go to the library more than normal people because their test is really hard, so that they have to go to the library to improvise, to remember their knowledge.

✓ Maybe to me, Chinese kids might go to the library more than normal kids because their tests are really hard, so they have to go to the library to improve and remember their knowledge.

The pronoun 'people' is too general; 'kids' fits better for comparison. 'Test' should be plural 'tests' to match 'kids'. 'Improvise' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'improve'. Also, 'so that' is unnecessary and can be replaced with 'so' for smoother flow.