Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문법 오류와 반복되는 표현이 있습니다. 'Books makes me think more creative'는 'Books make me think more creatively'로 수정해야 하며, 'it is fun to read books'는 중복되므로 다른 표현으로 바꾸는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 문장을 3~4문장으로 간결하게 구성하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 답변을 확장하세요.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading. It helps me think more creatively and relax after a busy day.

提案: 답변에 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'At library'는 'At the library'로 수정하고, 'many variety of books'는 'a wide variety of books'가 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 'because I am not a rich'는 'because I am not rich'로 고쳐야 합니다. 답변을 3~4문장으로 구성하고, 연결어를 사용해 내용을 풍부하게 하세요.

例: I usually read books at the library because it offers a wide variety of books for free. This is very helpful since I cannot afford to buy many books.

提案: 문법과 표현에 오류가 많습니다. 'there is so many times to play'는 의미가 불분명하며, 'went to the library usually'는 'usually went to the library'로 수정해야 합니다. 답변을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하고, 구체적인 이유를 들어 설명하세요.

例: When I was a kid, I usually went to the library because it was a quiet place to read and also a spot where I could meet my friends.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 'I have no idea of the Chinese kids'는 'I have no idea about Chinese kids'로 수정하고, 'So China Chinese kids then go to library too'는 'So I think Chinese kids go to the library too'로 고쳐야 합니다. 답변을 직접적으로 하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요.

例: I am not sure about Chinese kids, but since China and Korea share many cultural similarities, I believe Chinese children also often visit libraries.

× Books makes me think more creative and it is fun to read books.

✓ Books make me think more creatively and it is fun to read books.

'Books' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes'. Also, 'think more creative' is incorrect; it should be 'think more creatively' because 'think' is a verb and needs an adverb to modify it.

× At library I can read many variety of books for free.

✓ At the library, I can read a wide variety of books for free.

The phrase 'At library' is missing the definite article 'the'. Also, 'many variety' is incorrect; 'variety' is singular and should be preceded by 'a wide' or 'a large' to indicate quantity.

× It is helpful to me because I am not a rich.

✓ It is helpful to me because I am not rich.

The phrase 'I am not a rich' is incorrect because 'rich' is an adjective, not a noun. The article 'a' should be removed.

× When I was a kid, I went to the library usually because there is so many times to play and the library was the place to hang out with my friends.

✓ When I was a kid, I usually went to the library because there were so many places to play and the library was the place to hang out with my friends.

'There is so many times' is incorrect; 'times' is plural, so it should be 'there are'. Also, 'times to play' is awkward; 'places to play' is more appropriate. The adverb 'usually' should be placed before the verb 'went'.

× Actually I have no idea of the Chinese kids but China and Korea have many similar things.

✓ Actually, I have no idea about Chinese kids, but China and Korea have many similar things.

The phrase 'no idea of the Chinese kids' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'about'. Also, 'the Chinese kids' is too specific; 'Chinese kids' is more natural here.

× So China Chinese kids then go to library too.

✓ So Chinese kids in China also go to the library.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and uses proper word order and articles.