Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of "I visited library twice a week whenever I get a leisure time," say "I usually visit the library twice a week when I have free time." Also, try to reduce filler words like "uh" and make your sentences more concise and clear. Use linking words like "because" to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I usually visit the library twice a week when I have free time because it helps me focus more deeply on my subjects. I also go there to find new books that provide deeper insights into my studies.

提案: Your answer repeats phrases and has some grammatical errors. Try to avoid repetition like "whenever I visit" twice. Also, improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to explain reasons. For example, say "I usually spend about two hours in the library exploring books related to my field of science and technology because I want to learn about the latest innovations."

例: I usually spend about two hours in the library exploring books related to my field of science and technology because I want to learn about the latest innovations.

提案: Your answer has some unclear parts and grammatical mistakes. Avoid filler words like "UMM" and improve sentence flow. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. Also, try to be more specific about why those moments were special. For example, "When I was a kid, I often visited the library with my parents. I enjoyed those quiet moments because I could focus on my homework and learn new things without distractions."

例: When I was a kid, I often visited the library with my parents. I enjoyed those quiet moments because I could focus on my homework and learn new things without distractions.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to organize your ideas more clearly and use linking words like "because" or "therefore." Avoid filler words like "umm." For example, "Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library to complete their homework because the government encourages schools to promote library use. This helps students become more knowledgeable about their subjects."

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library to complete their homework because the government encourages schools to promote library use. This helps students become more knowledgeable about their subjects.

× I visited library twice a week whenever I get a leisure time from my college studies.

✓ I visit the library twice a week whenever I get leisure time from my college studies.

The sentence mixes past tense 'visited' with present tense 'get'. Since the action is habitual, present tense 'visit' is appropriate. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the' and 'a leisure time' should be 'leisure time' without 'a'.

× I visited library twice a week whenever I get a leisure time from my college studies.

✓ I visit the library twice a week whenever I get leisure time from my college studies.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'leisure time' is an uncountable noun and does not need the article 'a'.

× I usually go over there to explore new books.

✓ I usually go there to explore new books.

The phrase 'go over there' is informal and redundant here; 'go there' is sufficient. Also, 'over there' is acceptable but 'there' is more concise and appropriate in this context.

× I usually go and explore more books over there related to my particular subject theories.

✓ I usually go and explore more books there related to my particular subject theories.

The preposition 'over' is unnecessary before 'there' in this context. 'There' alone correctly indicates the location.

× I usually go and explore more books over there related to my particular subject theories.

✓ I usually go and explore more books there related to my particular subject theory.

The phrase 'subject theories' is awkward; 'subject theory' (singular) is more appropriate when referring to a specific field of study.

× I usually go over there to spend my time for almost about an 2 hours to.

✓ I usually go there to spend almost about 2 hours.

The preposition 'for' is unnecessary before 'almost about 2 hours'. Also, 'an 2 hours' is incorrect; '2 hours' does not need 'an'. The trailing 'to' is redundant and should be removed.

× When I was a kid I still remember I usually visit the library with my parents and I feel like it was one of the best moments of my life because I get the UMM.

✓ When I was a kid I still remember I usually visited the library with my parents and I feel like it was one of the best moments of my life because I got the UMM.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time is in the past ('when I was a kid'), past tense verbs 'visited' and 'got' should be used instead of 'visit' and 'get'.

× I really enjoy the time spending over there and finishing my homework with my parents and without any distraction and I feel like that even I can grab more knowledge related to my studies.

✓ I really enjoyed spending time there and finishing my homework with my parents without any distractions, and I feel like I could even gain more knowledge related to my studies.

The phrase 'spending over there' is incorrect; 'spending time there' is correct. 'Distraction' should be plural 'distractions'. Also, tense consistency requires past tense 'enjoyed' and modal verb 'could' for ability in past context.

× Chinese kids usually visit library to get the homework done and I feel that more the government has encouraged most of the international colleges and universities and schools to encourage student to visit library to grab more information about their umm particular topics which they are studying to make make them more informative and knowledgeable in today's world.

✓ Chinese kids usually visit the library to get their homework done, and I feel that the government has encouraged most international colleges, universities, and schools to encourage students to visit the library to get more information about their particular topics, which they are studying, to make them more informed and knowledgeable in today's world.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Student' should be plural 'students'. 'More the government' is incorrect; it should be 'the government'. Also, 'grab' is informal; 'get' or 'obtain' is better. The sentence is long and needs commas for clarity.