Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: သင်၏အဖြေသည် သဘာဝကျပြီး ထိရောက်မှုရှိရန် ပိုမိုရိုးရှင်းပြီး တိကျသော စကားလုံးများကို အသုံးပြုသင့်သည်။ မကြာခဏ သုံးသော စကားလုံးများကို ထပ်ခါထပ်ခါ မသုံးသင့်ပါ။ ဥပမာအားဖြင့် "I used to go to the library when I was young because I liked to read books there and borrow them. However, now I don't go very often." ဟု ပြောဆိုနိုင်ပါသည်။

例: Yes, I used to go to the library often when I was young because I enjoyed reading and borrowing books. However, nowadays, I don't visit the library very often.

提案: အဖြေကို ပိုမိုသေချာစွာ ဖော်ပြရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ စကားလုံးများကို သေချာရွေးချယ်ပြီး စကားလုံးချိတ်ဆက်စကားများကို အသုံးပြုပါ။ ဥပမာ "I usually read books and borrow them to use as references at home. Then, I study my lectures with these materials and return them on time."

例: In the library, I usually read books and borrow some to use as references at home. Then, I study my lectures with these materials and make sure to return them on time.

提案: အဖြေကို ပိုမိုသေချာစွာ ဖော်ပြရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ စကားလုံးချိတ်ဆက်စကားများကို အသုံးပြု၍ အကြောင်းအရာကို ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းစေပါ။ ဥပမာ "Yes, I frequently visited the library as a child because I enjoyed reading various books like science and adventure stories. This habit helped me improve my communication skills and general knowledge."

例: Yes, I frequently visited the library when I was a child because I enjoyed reading different kinds of books, such as science and adventure stories. This habit really helped me improve my communication skills and general knowledge.

提案: အဖြေကို ပိုမိုသေချာစွာ ဖော်ပြရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ စကားလုံးများကို သေချာရွေးချယ်ပြီး စကားလုံးချိတ်ဆက်စကားများကို အသုံးပြုပါ။ ဥပမာ "I'm not sure because I'm not Chinese, but I think Chinese children have good access to reading materials nowadays. Education in China has developed rapidly due to better resources and support."

例: I'm not sure because I'm not Chinese, but I believe Chinese children have good access to quality reading materials nowadays. Education in China has improved rapidly thanks to better resources and support.

× I used to go to the library when I was young because I liked to read the book out there and I also went to wanted to borrow the book from there.

✓ I used to go to the library when I was young because I liked to read the books out there and I also wanted to borrow books from there.

The phrase 'went to wanted' is incorrect; it should be 'wanted' alone to express past intention. Also, 'the book' should be plural 'books' because it refers to multiple books in the library. This correction aligns with proper past tense usage and plural form.

× But right now I'm not going.

✓ But right now I don't go.

The phrase 'I'm not going' suggests a current ongoing action, but the intended meaning is a habitual action, so 'I don't go' is correct to express the present habitual tense.

× Well, in the library I usually read the book and borrow them to my place as a reference.

✓ Well, in the library I usually read books and borrow them to my place as a reference.

'The book' is singular but 'them' refers to plural, so 'books' should be plural to match the pronoun 'them'.

× borrow them to my place as a reference.

✓ borrow them to my place for reference.

The preposition 'for' is correct to indicate purpose, so 'for reference' is appropriate instead of 'as a reference' in this context.

× After that, in my place, I study my lecture with the help of the those reference tech materials and I return them back to the library in time.

✓ After that, at my place, I study my lectures with the help of those reference tech materials and I return them to the library on time.

'In my place' should be 'at my place' to indicate location. 'My lecture' should be plural 'my lectures' if referring to multiple subjects. 'The those' is redundant; only 'those' is needed. 'Return them back' is redundant; 'return them' suffices. 'In time' is better expressed as 'on time' to indicate punctuality.

× And then it's really.

✓ And then it's really helpful.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a predicate. Adding 'helpful' completes the thought and makes the sentence meaningful.

× When I was a kid, I frequently visited the library because I enjoy reading many kinds of books such as scientific and adventure stories, and this habit really helped me to improve my communication skills and general knowledge is really.

✓ When I was a kid, I frequently visited the library because I enjoyed reading many kinds of books such as scientific and adventure stories, and this habit really helped me to improve my communication skills and general knowledge.

The verb 'enjoy' should be in past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past time frame. The phrase 'general knowledge is really' is incomplete and should be removed or completed; here it is removed for clarity.

× Well, I'm not sure about that because I'm not Chinese, but in my perspective Chinese kid have many access to really really good reading prizes nowadays.

✓ Well, I'm not sure about that because I'm not Chinese, but in my perspective Chinese kids have much access to really really good reading prizes nowadays.

'Chinese kid' should be plural 'Chinese kids' to agree with the plural verb 'have'. 'Many access' is incorrect; 'access' is uncountable and should be preceded by 'much'.

× China has been double off very rapidly due to their accessibility to the resource and educational support.

✓ China has been developing very rapidly due to its accessibility to resources and educational support.

'Double off' is incorrect; likely intended 'developing'. 'Their' should be 'its' to agree with singular 'China'. 'The resource' should be plural 'resources' to indicate multiple resources.