Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and be more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add a brief supporting detail. For example, you could say, "I don't go to the library often now, but when I was studying, I visited several times a week."

例: I don't go to the library often now, but when I was studying, I visited several times a week to access books and study materials.

提案: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Avoid filler words and correct sentence structure. For example, "I usually look for research articles related to my subject for my papers. Additionally, I enjoy reading novels during my leisure time."

例: I usually look for research articles related to my subject for my papers. Additionally, I enjoy reading novels during my leisure time.

提案: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly. For example, "I didn't go to the library as a child because there were few libraries available in my area for kids or students."

例: I didn't go to the library as a child because there were few libraries available in my area for kids or students.

提案: Avoid filler words and be more precise. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, "Although I don't know much about Chinese culture, I noticed that many Chinese students at university were hardworking and often used the library for research."

例: Although I don't know much about Chinese culture, I noticed that many Chinese students at university were hardworking and often used the library for research.

× Uh, not that much. Uh, when I was studying then I used to go, uh, multiple times in a week, uh, but not right now.

✓ Uh, not that much. Uh, when I was studying, I used to go multiple times a week, but not right now.

The phrase 'in a week' is incorrect here; the correct expression is 'a week' without 'in'. Also, 'then' is unnecessary and can be omitted for clarity and correctness.

× When I was visiting library then I was most of the time looking for the subject related to research articles for my research paper.

✓ When I was visiting the library, I was most of the time looking for subjects related to research articles for my research paper.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'the subject related to research articles' should be pluralized to 'subjects related to research articles' to match the context.

× Uh or secondly, I love literature and I was looking for some novels and reading books for my layer time.

✓ Uh, or secondly, I love literature and I was looking for some novels and reading books for my leisure time.

The word 'layer' is a mispronunciation or typo; the correct word is 'leisure'. Also, a comma after 'Uh' improves sentence clarity.

× I know I didn't go to the library because the area where I was living, there were not as much libraries available for the kids or for the students.

✓ I know I didn't go to the library because in the area where I was living, there were not many libraries available for kids or students.

The phrase 'not as much libraries' is incorrect; 'libraries' is countable, so 'many' should be used instead of 'much'. Also, 'for the kids or for the students' can be simplified to 'for kids or students'. The preposition 'in' is needed before 'the area'.

× So I think they used to go the library.

✓ So I think they used to go to the library.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before a place. Missing 'to' causes incorrect sentence structure.