List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of 'I believe I have a good memory and I can keep all those. Shopping item list in my memory without forgetting,' say 'I rely on my good memory to remember my shopping list without writing it down.'

例: I usually don't make a shopping list because I trust my memory to remember the items I need.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. Try to respond directly and clearly. For example, say 'I don't have a job yet because I am a college student, so I usually don't make lists for my schoolwork.'

例: I don't have a job yet since I'm a college student, so I don't usually make lists for my assignments.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, 'Some people prefer to rely on their good memory rather than writing things down, and others might find making lists time-consuming.'

例: Some people rely on their memory instead of writing lists, while others think making lists wastes time.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more formal language and avoiding repetition. For example, say 'I prefer making lists on my phone because it is always with me, allowing me to check the list anytime. In contrast, paper lists can be lost or damaged.'

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone since it's always with me and easy to access, unlike paper lists that can be lost or damaged.

× I actually don't make a list when I go shopping because I believe I have a good memory and I can keep all those. Shopping item list in my memory without forgetting.

✓ I actually don't make a list when I go shopping because I believe I have a good memory and I can keep all those shopping items in my memory without forgetting.

The original sentence incorrectly splits 'shopping item list' into a separate fragment, causing a sentence structure error. Combining it into one continuous sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Actually I don't work yet because I'm colleges and.

✓ Actually, I don't work yet because I'm in college.

The phrase 'I'm colleges and' is incorrect and incomplete. The correct expression is 'I'm in college.' Also, adding a comma after 'Actually' improves sentence flow.

× I usually don't make list for my works in there.

✓ I usually don't make lists for my work there.

The word 'list' should be plural 'lists' to match the context of multiple lists. 'Works' is incorrect here; 'work' is an uncountable noun referring to tasks or job, so it should remain singular.

× They may have a good memory and preferred keeping things in their mind instead of writing down them, or they may not like making lists and see it as a waste of time.

✓ They may have a good memory and prefer keeping things in their mind instead of writing them down, or they may not like making lists and see it as a waste of time.

The verb 'preferred' should be in present tense 'prefer' to match 'may have'. Also, 'writing down them' is incorrect; the correct order is 'writing them down'.

× If I wanna make a choice between them, my choice would be making a list on my phone because my phone is always with me and I can check it whenever I want just to remember the items that I wrote.

✓ If I want to make a choice between them, my choice would be making a list on my phone because my phone is always with me and I can check it whenever I want just to remember the items that I wrote.

The informal contraction 'wanna' should be replaced with the proper modal verb phrase 'want to' in formal speech or writing.

× But paper may not always be with be with me and it could be crashed or burnt.

✓ But paper may not always be with me and it could be damaged or burnt.

The phrase 'be with be with me' is a repetition error; it should be 'be with me'. Also, 'crashed' is not appropriate for paper; 'damaged' is a better choice.