List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Try to keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I shop because it helps me remember what I need and avoid buying unnecessary items. This way, I can manage my time efficiently and focus on the sections I need to visit.

提案: Your answer should be more coherent and use linking words to connect ideas. Clarify your points and avoid repetition. Use specific examples to explain how making lists helps you prioritize tasks.

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me keep track of my tasks. For example, I prioritize tasks that take less time first, which allows me to manage my workload more effectively.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to organize your answer. Avoid vague phrases and provide specific reasons why some people avoid making lists.

例: Some people might not like making lists because they believe they can manage their tasks from memory. Additionally, if they have fewer tasks, they may find lists unnecessary.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains some confusing phrases. Focus on giving a clear preference with reasons, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid irrelevant or unclear words and keep your answer concise.

例: I prefer to make lists on paper because using my phone can be distracting due to notifications and social media. Writing on paper helps me focus better on my tasks.

× He yes usually I make a list when I shop becauses remind me what I need from a market and escape here.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list when I shop because it reminds me what I need from the market and helps me avoid unnecessary things.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunctions and connectors such as 'He yes' and 'becauses'. The conjunction 'because' is misspelled and the sentence structure is confusing. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I make a list when I go to shop.

✓ I make a list when I go shopping.

The phrase 'go to shop' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go shopping' when referring to the activity.

× So I can I can manage my time to figure out what I need with section I have to.

✓ So I can manage my time to figure out what I need and which section I have to go to.

The sentence is missing proper conjunctions and prepositions to connect ideas clearly. Adding 'and' and 'which' clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, I always, I always make a list when I work because it is good to people notice what are, what we have, what I have work to do and make it proper list so I can follow my list.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I work because it helps people notice what work I have to do and allows me to make a proper list to follow.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has awkward phrasing. Correcting pronoun use and sentence structure improves clarity.

× And it's a lot, lot of time, a lot of effort while making a list.

✓ It takes a lot of time and effort to make a list.

The original sentence uses 'and' incorrectly at the start and repeats 'lot' unnecessarily. The correction simplifies and clarifies the sentence.

× I always ensure that I am making those work first who need a lesser time and then I could put vector B.

✓ I always ensure that I do the tasks that need less time first, and then I can move on to others.

The sentence has unclear phrasing and incorrect conjunctions. 'Vector B' is unclear and likely a mishearing; replacing it with 'others' makes sense. Also, 'lesser time' should be 'less time'.

× I I can say maybe that they think they can manage their work without making a list or maybe the other sharp mind they have a very photogenic memory or quick memory to memorize their work that's why people away to make a list.

✓ I can say maybe they think they can manage their work without making a list, or maybe they have a sharp mind with a very photographic or quick memory to memorize their work; that's why people avoid making a list.

The sentence has multiple issues including repetition, incorrect word choice ('photogenic' instead of 'photographic'), and missing conjunctions. Correcting these improves meaning and grammar.

× Or maybe they have not that much task to do so that's the reason behind there are not making a list for working.

✓ Or maybe they do not have that many tasks to do, so that's the reason they are not making a list for work.

The sentence misuses pronouns and quantifiers ('that much task' should be 'that many tasks') and has awkward phrasing. Correcting pronouns and quantifiers improves clarity.

× I prefer to make a list on paper why not ****?

✓ I prefer to make a list on paper rather than on my phone.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. The correction provides a clear comparison using proper conjunctions.

× Because you know when whenever we open a phone is to cut slow to so many sexual like social media and so many things so many notifications on her phone which one can distract us.

✓ Because, you know, whenever we open a phone, it is slow and has so many distractions like social media and notifications that can distract us.

The original sentence has misplaced adverbs and confusing phrasing. Correcting adverb placement and sentence structure improves clarity.

× So yes making a list on a paper which will focus you on your work task not unnecessary things.

✓ So yes, making a list on paper will help you focus on your work tasks and not on unnecessary things.

The sentence lacks proper conjunctions and articles. Adding commas and articles improves readability and grammar.

× So paper is best rather than phone.

✓ So paper is better than a phone.

The phrase 'rather than phone' is incorrect; the correct comparative form is 'better than a phone'.