List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and unclear words, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use simple and correct sentences, and avoid redundancy. For example, start by stating whether you make a list or not, then explain why with specific reasons and linking words.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping because it helps me stay organized and not forget anything. For example, last week I wrote down all the items I needed, so shopping was quick and easy.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear words and incomplete sentences. Focus on giving a direct answer first, then explain with clear supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating unclear words and try to use simple vocabulary relevant to the context.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because they help me stay organized and confident. For example, when I have many tasks, listing them makes my work more efficient and manageable.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear ideas. Try to clearly state the reason and support it with specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they find it boring or confusing. Also, they may feel lazy or think it's unnecessary, so they don't make lists regularly.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Try to clearly state your preference first, then explain why with specific reasons and linking words. Use simple and relevant vocabulary to express your ideas naturally.

例: I prefer to make lists on paper because writing by hand helps me remember things better. Also, it's easier for me to review my list without distractions from my phone.

× Is a mcleese when I when I shop 'cause it make me.

✓ I make a list when I shop because it makes me.

The original sentence lacks a subject and uses incorrect verb forms. 'Is a mcleese' is unclear and should be 'I make a list'. Also, 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× 'cause it make me.

✓ 'cause it makes me.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Some reliable and don't don't get confused.

✓ It is reliable and helps me not get confused.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a proper verb. 'Some reliable' is incorrect; it should be 'It is reliable'. Also, 'don't don't get confused' is repetitive and unclear; rephrased to 'helps me not get confused'.

× So I think it will be great. To make a list when you're shopping because it really make your day so piece of cake.

✓ So I think it is great to make a list when you're shopping because it really makes your day a piece of cake.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also, 'will be great' is changed to 'is great' to match the present context. Added 'a' before 'piece of cake' for correct idiomatic expression.

× Yes, hi Mcleese, my work. Come be, 'cause he'd sometimes give me.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my work because it sometimes gives me.

'Hi Mcleese' is unclear and likely a mishearing of 'I make a list'. 'Come be' is incorrect and removed. 'He'd' is unclear; replaced with 'it' to refer to the list. Verb agreement corrected to 'gives' for singular subject.

× Reliable and confidence.

✓ Reliability and confidence.

'Reliable' is an adjective; the noun form 'reliability' is needed here. 'Confidence' is correct as a noun.

× For example when you have a job. Like completely job, he will make it, will list it and it will be more efficient and we.

✓ For example, when you have a job, like a complex job, you will make a list and it will be more efficient.

Sentence fragments combined for clarity. 'Completely job' corrected to 'complex job'. 'He will make it' changed to 'you will make a list' for clarity and subject consistency. Removed incomplete ending.

× So the reason why people don't like make a list is 'cause it's.

✓ So the reason why people don't like to make a list is because they are.

The verb 'make' needs 'to' before it in this context. 'It's' is incomplete and unclear; replaced with 'they are' to refer to people.

× Their lazy there sometimes get confusing while making list.

✓ They are lazy and sometimes get confused while making a list.

'Their' is a possessive pronoun; 'They are' is correct for the subject. 'There' is incorrect; replaced with 'and'. 'Get confusing' should be 'get confused' to describe people's feelings.

× So I think it's. To make it make least consistently.

✓ So I think it's important to make a list consistently.

Sentence fragments combined for clarity. 'Make it make least' is unclear; corrected to 'make a list'. Added 'important' for meaning.

× I prefer for paper BIC, AWS.

✓ I prefer paper lists.

'Prefer for paper' is incorrect; 'prefer paper' is correct. 'BIC, AWS' is unclear and removed for clarity.

× While you writing something on your paper you will get more memory and the.

✓ While you write something on paper, you will remember more.

'While you writing' should be 'while you write'. 'Get more memory' is incorrect; 'remember more' is appropriate.

× Will get no. Uh, another it's.

✓ It helps me remember better.

Original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Rephrased to express intended meaning clearly.

× It's piece of cake to member my memory.

✓ It's a piece of cake to remember.

'Member my memory' is incorrect; should be 'remember'. Added 'a' before 'piece of cake' for correct idiomatic expression.