List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Avoid sentence fragments and ensure each sentence is complete. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct spelling errors like 'avoid'.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go grocery shopping because it helps me remember everything I need and saves time. For example, I write down all the items I want to buy so I don't forget anything important. This way, I can shop more effectively and avoid buying unnecessary things.

提案: Focus on grammar and word choice to improve clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, correct phrases like 'buying prioritize urgent task' to 'by prioritizing urgent tasks'.

例: Yes, I always make a detailed list of tasks before I start my workday. It helps me plan my day more effectively and stay aware of what I have completed and what needs attention. For example, by prioritizing urgent tasks, I can organize and manage my time efficiently, which ultimately boosts my productivity.

提案: Clarify your ideas and correct errors such as 'make English' which should be 'make lists'. Use plural forms correctly and improve sentence flow with linking words.

例: Some people don't like to make lists because they prefer to organize their thoughts mentally rather than writing them down. For example, they might find that planning in their head works better for them and feels more natural. Additionally, some people think that making lists can be time-consuming or unnecessary.

提案: Work on sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity. Avoid repetition and correct phrases like 'I some time for get it at home' to 'sometimes forget it at home'. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I always have it with me, so it's very convenient. Sometimes, I forget to bring paper lists at home, but I rarely forget my phone. This is why I can easily check and update my list anytime.

× Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go grocery shopping because it helped me.

✓ Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go grocery shopping because it helps me.

The sentence mixes present tense 'always make' with past tense 'helped'. Since the action is habitual, 'helps' in present tense is appropriate.

× To remember everything I need and save time.

✓ It helps me to remember everything I need and save time.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Adding 'It helps me' completes the sentence structure.

× For example, I write down all the items I want to buy so I don't forget anything important.

✓ For example, I write down all the items I want to buy so that I don't forget anything important.

Adding 'that' improves clarity and sentence flow, making the purpose clause explicit.

× This way I can solve more effectively and ovoid buying unnecessary things.

✓ This way, I can shop more effectively and avoid buying unnecessary things.

The verb 'solve' is incorrect here; 'shop' fits the context. Also, 'ovoid' is a typo for 'avoid'. Adding a comma after 'This way' improves readability.

× Yes, I always make a detailed list of task before I start my work day.

✓ Yes, I always make a detailed list of tasks before I start my work day.

'Task' should be plural 'tasks' because a list typically contains multiple items.

× It's helped me to plan my day more effectively and keep me aware of what I have done and watch the needs attention.

✓ It helps me to plan my day more effectively and keeps me aware of what I have done and what needs attention.

'It's helped' is past tense; present tense 'It helps' matches habitual action. 'Keep' should be 'keeps' to agree with singular subject 'It'. 'Watch the needs attention' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'what needs attention'.

× For example, buying prioritize urgent task, I can still organize and manage my time effectively which ultimately boost my productivity.

✓ For example, by prioritizing urgent tasks, I can still organize and manage my time effectively, which ultimately boosts my productivity.

The original sentence is ungrammatical. 'Buying prioritize urgent task' is incorrect; 'by prioritizing urgent tasks' is correct. 'Boost' should be 'boosts' to agree with singular subject 'which'.

× Some people don't like to make English because they prefer to organize their thought mentally rather than writing them down.

✓ Some people don't like to make lists because they prefer to organize their thoughts mentally rather than writing them down.

'Make English' is incorrect; likely intended 'make lists'. 'Thought' should be plural 'thoughts' to match 'their'.

× For example, they might find that planning in their head work better for them and feel more natural.

✓ For example, they might find that planning in their head works better for them and feels more natural.

'Work' and 'feel' should be 'works' and 'feels' to agree with singular subject 'planning'.

× Additionally, some people think that the making list can be time consuming or unnecessary.

✓ Additionally, some people think that making lists can be time-consuming or unnecessary.

'The making list' is incorrect; 'making lists' is correct. 'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming'.

× I prefer to make list on my phone because I always have it with me so it's very convenient.

✓ I prefer to make lists on my phone because I always have it with me so it's very convenient.

'Make list' should be plural 'make lists' as it refers to the general action of making multiple lists.

× If I use paper I some time for get it at home but I really forgot my phone.

✓ If I use paper, I sometimes forget it at home, but I rarely forget my phone.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'I some time for get it at home' is incorrect; corrected to 'I sometimes forget it at home'. 'Really forgot' changed to 'rarely forget' for clarity and tense consistency.

× This this why I can easily check and update my list anytime.

✓ This is why I can easily check and update my list anytime.

'This this' is a repetition error; corrected to 'This is' to form a proper sentence.