List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding short, choppy sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and clarify your points. Also, use the present tense consistently when talking about habits.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping, especially to grocery stores, because I have many items to buy. It helps me remember everything I need and prevents me from forgetting important things.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then explain with supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and be specific about your experience.

例: When I was younger, I used to make lists for my work, especially to keep track of tasks in order. It was difficult to remember everything, so the lists helped me stay organized. However, now I rarely make lists because I have developed better memory skills.

提案: Your answer is somewhat relevant but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, avoid vague phrases like "intelligence of remembering"; instead, use clearer vocabulary.

例: Some people might dislike making lists because they have a good memory and prefer to remember things mentally. Personally, I find it hard to remember everything, so I prefer to write down all the things I need.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and coherent by avoiding awkward phrases like "by digitalization and our smart friends." Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Due to digitalization and the convenience of smartphones, I usually make my lists on my phone. Sometimes I use paper, but mostly I prefer my phone because it is more efficient and easy to access.

× Yes, of course I made the list.

✓ Yes, of course I make a list.

The question is in the present tense 'Do you make a list?', so the answer should also be in the present tense to match the habitual action. Using 'made' (past tense) is inconsistent here.

× When I want to. Shop from grocery stores because I have a lot of. Items so it helped me to remember. All of my needs.

✓ When I want to shop at grocery stores because I have a lot of items, it helps me to remember all of my needs.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unnecessary periods breaking the sentence incorrectly. Also, 'helped' is past tense but the context suggests a habitual action, so 'helps' (present tense) is appropriate.

× Well, when I was younger, yes, I did up, especially the sequence of. My warrant because it was so hard to remember but now I do it. Mindlessly.

✓ Well, when I was younger, yes, I did, especially the sequence of my work because it was so hard to remember, but now I do it mindlessly.

The phrase 'did up' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'did' referring to making lists. 'Warrant' is likely a mispronunciation or error for 'work'. Also, the sentence fragments need to be combined properly for clarity.

× Personally I can't remember all of my stuff so. I preferred to note everything that I need.

✓ Personally, I can't remember all of my stuff, so I prefer to note everything that I need.

The original uses past tense 'preferred' which conflicts with the present context. Also, the sentence is fragmented and missing commas. 'Prefer' in present tense fits better here.

× Well, by digitalization and our smart friends, actually. I make a list on my phone usually and sometimes I do it on paper, but mostly on my phone. Because it is more efficient.

✓ Well, with digitalization and our smart devices, actually, I usually make a list on my phone and sometimes on paper, but mostly on my phone because it is more efficient.

'By digitalization' is incorrect; 'with digitalization' is the correct preposition. 'Smart friends' is likely a misstatement for 'smart devices'. Also, sentence fragments should be combined for clarity.