Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like "sort of" or repeating ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially in the shower. It helps me unwind after a stressful day and gives me a boost of energy, so I often use it as a kind of personal therapy.

提案: Give a direct answer and clarify reasoning without repetition. Use one linking phrase to explain why you haven't learned formally and mention a specific condition when you might.

例: No, I haven't had formal lessons because I'm satisfied with my current singing level. However, if I decided to pursue singing more seriously or perform publicly, I would consider taking lessons to improve technique.

提案: Be more specific and natural: state the person clearly, give a concrete reason and an example of when you might sing for them.

例: I like to sing for my mother because she always enjoys my singing and it makes her happy. For example, I plan to sing at her birthday next year to show my appreciation.

提案: Avoid vague or incorrect statements. Start with a clear opinion, give a specific reason or example, and use accurate phrasing (e.g. "therapy" not "one of therapy").

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it reduces stress and creates social bonds. For instance, people often feel uplifted after singing in a choir or at a celebration.

提案: Make the answer more concise and use linking words. State your general preference, then give a brief reason and an example.

例: It depends, but I usually enjoy listening to friends, family or well-known artists because I know their style. However, I might be less interested in listening to strangers unless someone recommends them.

提案: Give a direct, concise answer and avoid awkward phrasing. Explain clearly why you haven't taken classes and mention a condition that might change your mind.

例: No, I haven't taken singing classes because I'm happy with my current ability and I don't plan to pursue a professional career. If I ever decided to perform publicly or compete, I would consider lessons.

× I think it's everyone's favorite and I really love singing because singing gives me sort of energy and makes me excited, especially from a stressful day.

✓ I think it's everyone's favorite and I really love singing because singing gives me energy and makes me feel excited, especially after a stressful day.

The phrase 'sort of energy' is unnatural and vague; use 'energy' without 'sort of'. 'Makes me excited' should be 'makes me feel excited' to use the verb 'feel' with an emotional adjective. Also 'from a stressful day' is incorrect preposition use for time; 'after a stressful day' is correct. Suggestion: use clear quantifiers (no 'sort of') and correct prepositions for time.

× No I haven't since I am satisfied with my singing college singing level.

✓ No, I haven't, since I am satisfied with my college singing level.

The original is awkward and has word order errors. 'I haven't' refers to 'learned' implicitly; keep present perfect with a clarifying clause. 'singing college singing level' repeats 'singing'; correct order is 'college singing level'. Suggestion: remove redundancy and place modifiers in natural order.

× I have never thought to learn how to sing, but I believe it would be much better to learn how to sing if you you want to level up your singing level.

✓ I have never thought about learning how to sing, but I believe it would be much better to learn if you want to improve your singing.

Use 'thought about learning' (correct verb + gerund) instead of 'thought to learn'. Remove duplicated 'you'. 'Level up your singing level' is redundant; use 'improve your singing'. Suggestion: use 'think about' + gerund and avoid repetition.

× I like to sing for my mother since she loves hearing me singing great, which I'm really grateful for.

✓ I like to sing for my mother since she loves hearing me sing well, which I'm really grateful for.

Use the base verb after 'hearing' (hear someone do something): 'hearing me sing', not 'hearing me singing'. 'Singing great' is incorrect collocation; use 'sing well'. Suggestion: after verbs like 'hear', use the base form and choose appropriate adverb.

× So someday I would like to sing for her to show appreciation.

✓ So someday I would like to sing for her to show my appreciation.

Sentence is mostly correct but missing 'my' before 'appreciation' to specify whose appreciation. This is a determiners/possessive issue related to modal phrase clarity. Suggestion: include possessive determiners when needed.

× Yes I do. I believe singing is one of therapy for human.

✓ Yes, I do. I believe singing is a form of therapy for people.

'one of therapy' is ungrammatical; use 'a form of therapy' or 'one form of therapy'. 'Human' as a noun is incorrect in this context; use 'people' or 'humans'. Also add commas after 'Yes'. Suggestion: use correct article phrases and countable expressions.

× Human always loved singing from the past as some scientists shows.

✓ Humans have always loved singing since the past, as some scientists show.

Use plural 'Humans'. For a general truth relating past to present, use present perfect 'have always loved'. 'From the past' is awkward; 'since the past' or better 'for a long time' is clearer. 'Scientists shows' is wrong subject-verb agreement; use 'show'. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and use correct tense for ongoing truths.

× So I believe singing can bring happiness to human.

✓ So I believe singing can bring happiness to people.

Use plural noun 'people' instead of 'human' as a count noun. Suggestion: use 'people' or 'humans' depending on formality.

× It varies by person but if it was my friends or family or famous artists I would like to listen to other singing, but if it was strangers that I have never met or talked then I would hesitate to listen.

✓ It varies by person, but if it is my friends, family, or famous artists I would like to listen to them singing; if they are strangers I have never met or spoken to, I would hesitate to listen.

Tense consistency: use present 'is' for general statements, not 'was'. Repetition and phrasing 'other singing' is incorrect; use 'them singing'. 'Talked' needs object 'to' and better 'spoken to'. Also punctuation and clause structure improved. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for general truths and use correct verb phrases.

× No, I haven't because I feel satisfied with my current singing ability and haven't felt that I need to level up my singing level.

✓ No, I haven't because I feel satisfied with my current singing ability and don't feel that I need to improve my singing.

Mix of tenses and forms: 'haven't felt that I need' is awkward; use present 'don't feel' to match current state. 'Level up my singing level' is redundant; use 'improve my singing'. Suggestion: maintain consistent present tense for current feelings and avoid redundancy.

× And personally, I'm not planning to pass you a professional singing career so I haven't.

✓ And personally, I'm not planning to pursue a professional singing career, so I haven't.

'Pass you a professional singing career' is incorrect collocation. The correct verb is 'pursue' a career. Also add comma before 'so'. Suggestion: learn common verb-noun collocations like 'pursue a career'.