Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more clearly and organise your response: give a clear topic sentence, then 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid unrelated fragments. Use correct tense and simple grammar (e.g. "after I finish my exams").

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax. After I finish my exams, I often go to a karaoke café near my campus with friends, and singing together helps us unwind.

提案: Use a direct topic sentence and correct verb forms. Add a short reason or detail with a linking word (e.g. "because").

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons because I prefer to sing casually for fun at home or with friends.

提案: Be clear about who you mean and organise your idea: state the person, then give a specific reason. Avoid confusing pronouns and extra words like "literally."

例: I would like to sing for my friends, especially one friend who recently started a relationship; I want to sing a love song for her to celebrate.

提案: Make a concise claim and support it with one clear, specific example. Avoid unclear words and fragments. Use linking words like "for example" properly and check sentence endings.

例: Yes, I think singing brings happiness. For example, after my exams I sing with friends at a nearby café, and that activity cheers me up and reduces stress.

提案: Use correct verb forms and be specific: name what you enjoy and give a concise example. Keep sentences short and coherent, using linking words like "especially" and "for example" correctly.

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to other people sing, especially my favorite singers because their voices are inspiring. For example, a few months ago I went to my favourite singer's concert and really enjoyed the performance.

提案: Give a clear past-tense statement and one specific detail about the class. Correct grammar (e.g. "I took a music class at school") and explain briefly why you chose that song.

例: Yes, I took a music class at school when I was in Year 5. Students had to perform one song for an exam, and I chose a simple, fun song because I was shy and wanted something easy to sing.

× Yes I do. I think singing is the way that I can relax.

✓ Yes, I do. I think singing is a way I can relax.

Use of article 'the' is unnecessary; 'a way' is the correct idiomatic expression. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural rhythm.

× When I have the finish my exam, I usually go to singing with my friends.

✓ When I finish my exam, I usually go singing with my friends.

'Have the finish' is ungrammatical. Use simple present 'finish' for a time clause about scheduled actions. 'Go to singing' is incorrect; use 'go singing' or 'go to sing'.

× Go to color again.

✓ We go to Khao San Road again.

Original is unclear and ungrammatical. Provide a plausible location phrase; 'Go to color again' lacks subject and verb agreement and clarity. If the intended meaning was returning to a place, use 'We go to [place] again' or 'We go there again.'

× That near my campus.

✓ That is near my campus.

Sentence missing verb 'is' to link subject and location. Preposition 'near' is fine but needs a copula 'is'.

× No, I do not learn how to sing before.

✓ No, I have not learned how to sing before.

When referring to experience up to now, use present perfect 'have not learned' rather than simple present 'do not learn'. Also 'learned' is the past participle.

× I just sing in the way that I want.

✓ I just sing in the way I want.

Remove unnecessary 'that'. The sentence is acceptable after this small correction; 'sing' present tense is fine for habitual action.

× On the top of my head I want to sing for my friends because now she have a boyfriend I literally love so I want to sing the love song for them.

✓ Off the top of my head, I want to sing for my friends because one of them now has a boyfriend I really love, so I want to sing love songs for them.

Multiple pronoun and agreement errors: 'On the top of my head' should be 'Off the top of my head.' 'She have' is incorrect: use 'she has' or rephrase to 'one of them now has.' 'Literally' is often misused; 'really' fits better. Also split into clearer clauses and pluralize 'love songs' if singing more than one or generalize to 'a love song.'

× Yes, I do. I literally agree with that Singing is the way that Kelly like people for example, when I'm finished my exam, I usually go to singing with my friends.

✓ Yes, I agree with that. Singing is a way people enjoy, for example, when I finish my exams I usually go singing with my friends.

Sentence had capitalization and pronoun issues. 'Literally agree with that Singing' needs punctuation and 'that' is unnecessary. 'Kelly like people' is unclear — likely intended 'people' in general. Use consistent tense: 'when I finish my exams' and 'go singing.'

× I think this activity can make me happy and. Lidium about this that.

✓ I think this activity can make me happy and relax me. I feel that way about it.

Original contains fragments and nonsense 'Lidium'. Provide coherent repair: complete the second clause and correct vocabulary to express the idea.

× Yes, I happy to listening when someone singing, especially when the my singer my favorite singles have to conscious.

✓ Yes, I'm happy to listen when someone is singing, especially when my favorite singer performs.

Missing auxiliary 'am' and incorrect gerund forms: use 'happy to listen' (infinitive) or 'happy listening' with different structure. 'When someone singing' needs 'is singing'. The phrase 'my favorite singles have to conscious' is unclear; assume intended 'my favorite singer performs.'

× I happy to listening that voice for example.

✓ I was happy to listen to that voice, for example.

Use past tense 'was' for a past event and correct verb pattern 'happy to listen to' rather than 'happy to listening'.

× A few months ago I went to my favorite singer concerts and happy to listen that.

✓ A few months ago I went to my favorite singer's concert and was happy to listen.

Use singular possession 'singer's concert' or plural 'concerts'. Add past tense auxiliary 'was' and use 'listen' with correct structure. Remove 'that'.

× Yes I had when I study at the jet 5.

✓ Yes, I did when I studied at JET 5.

Use simple past 'did' for experience and 'studied' for past tense. 'Had' alone is unclear; change to 'did' (i.e., 'Yes, I did').

× They have the music class in my school and is student should sing one song for exam.

✓ They had music classes at my school and each student had to sing one song for the exam.

Subject-verb agreement and pluralization: 'They have the music class' -> 'They had music classes' (past context). 'is student should' is incorrect; use 'each student had to' or 'students had to.'

× And I sing the Kiss song because in Whenever the shy I think his song is very fun and easy to sing for me.

✓ And I sang the song 'Kiss' because whenever I was shy I thought the song was fun and easy for me to sing.

Use past tense 'sang' for a past event. Fix word order and tense consistency: 'Whenever I was shy' and 'I thought the song was...' Remove extraneous words and clarify meaning.