Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要点不清、语法和词汇错误较多。建议用一两句直接回答，然后用一到两句具体说明原因，注意时态和拼写（如 singing 而不是 seeing，tone 而不是 tune）。尽量把句子简短、自然，避免重复。示例结构：肯定/否定 + 原因 + 具体细节。

例: No, I don't enjoy singing. I stopped after a bad experience in primary school when my teacher criticized my voice, which really damaged my confidence.

提案: 表达混乱且含糊，信息冗余。建议先直接回答是否学过，然后给出具体细节（什么时候、以何种方式学、为什么停止）。注意词汇搭配（learn to sing, talent for singing, on camera）和句子简洁性。

例: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons. I only sang in mandatory primary school music classes and later practised singing alone on my phone, but negative feedback put me off.

提案: 回答直接但语法和拼写错误影响表达（singing 而不是 seeing）。建议一句主题句说明对象，再简单说明原因并给出一例支持。保持总句数不超过5句。

例: Nobody. I prefer to sing only when I'm alone because I'm self-conscious about my voice and don't want others to judge me.

提案: 观点明确但表达不够连贯、有不恰当或错误的词汇（singing, poor? funny?）。建议先肯定其积极作用，然后用'however'引出限制，并给出具体例子或解释为什么。注意用词礼貌且准确。

例: Yes, singing can make people happy because a good performance can be moving and uplifting. However, if the singer is off-key, it might make listeners uncomfortable instead of joyful.

提案: 回答有意思但句子结构混乱，词汇错误（things? marathon? unclear ending）。建议先直接回答喜欢与否，然后说明喜欢的原因并举例（喜欢的风格、感受）。保持句子连贯，使用连接词 like 'because' 和 'for example'。

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because they can create a strong atmosphere. For example, I often listen to sad songs that help me reflect and express my emotions.

提案: 回答信息完整但语法错误较多（took, compulsory, teacher wasn't encouraging）。建议以过去式描述经历，说明何时、怎样的课程以及老师的影响，并提出现在的态度或结果。保持简洁明了。

例: Yes, I took compulsory music lessons in primary school, but the teacher's harsh comments damaged my confidence, so I stopped singing publicly.

× No, I'm not really into seeing because I have some bad memory of it.

✓ No, I'm not really into singing because I have some bad memories of it.

原句中有两个问题：1) "seeing" 是错误的词，应为 "singing"（拼写错误/用词不当）。2) "some bad memory" 在此语境中应使用复数 "some bad memories" 或不定冠词 a bad memory。建议使用复数以表达若干不愉快的回忆。注意单词拼写和名词单复数。

× When my first TI test on a music class, my music teacher said that my tune is such bad and my voice just like a donkey, so my confidence is hurt.

✓ When I had my first test in a music class, my music teacher said that my tune was so bad and my voice sounded like a donkey, so my confidence was hurt.

原句问题：1) 时态不一致，应使用过去时描述过去发生的事情（had, was, sounded, was hurt）。2) 介词搭配错误：应为 "test in a music class" 而不是 "on a music class"。3) 形容词/副词用法错误："such bad" 应为 "so bad" 或 "such a bad ..."。4) 比喻表达需用动词 'sounded like'。建议统一使用过去时并调整固定搭配。

× No, I have never learned how to sing in an unclear way because umm, I don't think I have so many talent on singing, so I just learn how to sing in the camera.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing in a proper way because I don't think I have much talent for singing, so I just learned how to sing to the camera.

原句问题：1) "in an unclear way" 用法不自然，应为 "in a proper way"（或 "formally"）表示未正式学习。2) "so many talent" 名词 "talent" 不可数，应用 "much talent"，并且介词应为 "for singing"。3) 时态和动词形式：描述过去经历应使用过去式 "learned"。4) 短语 "sing in the camera" 不正确，应为 "sing to the camera"。建议注意可数/不可数名词、介词搭配和时态一致。

× Uh, music classes when I was in primary school and that hurt my confidence.

✓ Music classes when I was in primary school hurt my confidence.

原句结构不完整并含多余连词 'and that'，可用简单过去时陈述："Music classes ... hurt my confidence." 这里描述的是过去的事实，用过去时更合适；同时删去多余成分使句子更清晰。

× I guess it's nobody because umm, I know my skills on seeing is such terrible, so I don't want to sing to somebody else.

✓ I guess nobody, because I know my singing skills are terrible, so I don't want to sing for other people.

原句问题：1) "I guess it's nobody" 不自然，改为 "I guess nobody"。2) "skills on seeing" 用词误用，应为 "singing skills"。3) 主谓一致："skills ... is" 应为复数动词 "are"。4) 介词搭配：应是 "sing for other people" 而非 "sing to somebody else"。建议注意名词搭配和主谓一致。

× I don't want them know that I'm not very talented in singing.

✓ I don't want them to know that I'm not very talented at singing.

原句缺少不定式标记 'to'，应为 "don't want them to know"。另外介词搭配建议用 "talented at singing" 或 "talented in singing"，这里用 "at" 更常见。建议注意动词结构（want sb to do sth）和介词搭配。

× Yes, I believe that seeing can bring happiness to other people, but that's just for the people who sing very well.

✓ Yes, I believe that singing can bring happiness to other people, but that's just for people who sing very well.

原句 'seeing' 拼写错误，应为 'singing'。句尾 'the people who' 在此可省略定冠词，直接用 'people who' 更自然。建议注意拼写和定冠词用法。

× People around them may feel touched and happy, but if the people who seem very poor, that will not bring happiness, that brings funny.

✓ People around them may feel touched and happy, but if the singers are very poor, that will not bring happiness; it will be funny instead.

原句问题：1) 结构不完整且从句搭配错误："if the people who seem very poor" 应改为简单从句如 "if the singers are very poor"。2) 用词不当："that brings funny" 不正确，应为 "it will be funny" 或 "it will be amusing"。3) 时态和指代需明确。建议简化从句并用合适的形容词/名词表达 '有趣/好笑'。

× Yes, I like listening to other thing because I love the atmosphere which the singers create especially the singer who sings sad music which is really marathon that make me feel really sad and I can express my emotion by the.

✓ Yes, I like listening to others because I love the atmosphere the singers create, especially a singer who sings sad music that is really moving and makes me feel sad; I can express my emotions through it.

原句问题很多：1) "listening to other thing" 用词错误，应为 "listening to others" 或 "listening to other people"。2) 从句冗长且语序混乱，"which is really marathon" 拼写/用词错误，可能意为 'moving' 或 'emotional'。3) 主谓一致和动词形式需调整："that make me" 应为 "that makes me"。4) 句尾不完整 "by the" 应补全为 "through it" 或 "through the music"。建议拆分为两三个短句，注意词汇选择和主谓一致。

× Yes, but I just taken some career lessons when I was in primary school because that's the essential course that school have to set.

✓ Yes, but I just took some music lessons when I was in primary school because that's an essential course that the school has to offer.

原句问题：1) 时态错误："just taken" 应为过去式 "took"。2) 词汇错误："career lessons" 不合适，应为 "music lessons"（根据上下文）。3) 冠词和数一致："that's the essential course" 改为 "an essential course" 更自然；同时 "school have to set" 主谓不一致，应为 "the school has to offer" 或 "schools have to offer"。建议注意时态、词汇以及冠词和主谓一致。

× Umm, but the music teacher in that school is not very encouraging. Uh, he hurt my confidence in singing, so I don't sing anymore.

✓ Umm, but the music teacher at that school was not very encouraging. He hurt my confidence in singing, so I don't sing anymore.

原句问题主要是时态不一致：描述过去经历时应使用过去时 "was not" 和 "hurt"（过去式与原形相同）；这里把 'is' 改为 'was' 更符合语境。注意过去事件用过去时。