Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Keep within 3–4 sentences. Also correct tense and plural errors (e.g., 'since I was in kindergarten', 'I have always sung').

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax. I have loved singing since kindergarten, and I often performed at school events. For example, I used to sing at our annual Christmas concert, which made me feel confident and happy.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms, and give one concise reason with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use 'learned' or 'taken' and explain briefly why not with specifics.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I usually learn songs by listening and imitating recordings, so I haven't felt the need for professional classes. Also, I prefer to spend my time and money on other hobbies like dancing.

提案: Provide a direct answer and clear reasons. Correct vocabulary errors ('sing' not 'sin'), improve sentence structure and be specific about occasions or people. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundant words.

例: Actually, I don't usually sing for specific people; I sing mainly for school events. For instance, I was chosen to perform at our Christmas program and other celebrations, so I sang to participate in those activities.

提案: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar ('happiest activity' or 'a very happy activity', 'express their emotions') and improve coherence.

例: Yes, absolutely — I believe singing can make people happy because it allows them to express emotions and connect with others. For example, friends often sing together at gatherings or parties, which creates a cheerful atmosphere.

提案: Answer clearly and avoid confusing or irrelevant details. Correct grammar and pronoun use, and give a specific example of when you listen. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing even though I'm not a strong singer myself. For example, I often listen to my friends perform at small gatherings because I enjoy their voices and the atmosphere.

提案: Respond directly and use correct grammar. Explain briefly why you haven't taken classes and offer a clear preference. Use linking words and avoid fillers ('uh', 'like').

例: No, I have never taken a singing class because I don't feel fully committed to singing. Instead, I prefer dancing and have taken dance classes, which I enjoy more and find more fulfilling.

× Yes I do, singing is one of my favorite.

✓ Yes, I do; singing is one of my favorite activities.

The sentence lacks a clear noun after 'favorite' and needs punctuation. Add 'activities' to complete the noun phrase and use comma/semicolon for clarity. Suggestion: include the noun that 'favorite' modifies and separate independent clauses properly.

× I do this.

✓ I do this often.

The sentence 'I do this.' is grammatically correct but vague. Adding 'often' clarifies frequency and fits the present tense context. Suggestion: include adverbs of frequency when describing habitual actions.

× I like singing since when I was kindergartens and I always sing and perform on special day in school and I love singing because it's kinda relaxing.

✓ I have liked singing since I was in kindergarten, and I always sang and performed on special days at school; I love singing because it's kind of relaxing.

Problems: incorrect preposition/phrase 'since when I was kindergartens' (use 'since I was in kindergarten'); plural 'kindergartens' wrong; tense inconsistency (use present perfect 'have liked' for a continuing state and past 'sang' for past habitual events); 'special day' should be plural and use preposition 'at school'; 'kinda' is informal — use 'kind of.' Suggestion: use 'since' with a point in time and adjust tenses for ongoing habits vs past events.

× No, I never learn how to since, but I can since because I just follow the lilies and listen to the music and I just follow it.

✓ No, I never learned how to, but I can because I just follow the melodies and listen to the music.

Errors: 'never learn' should be past tense 'never learned'; extraneous 'since' is incorrect; 'lilies' is a wrong word — likely 'melodies'; repetition 'I just follow it' unnecessary. Suggestion: use past tense for experiences that did not happen and choose correct vocabulary.

× But I've never take, uh, singing class like professional class like that.

✓ But I've never taken a professional singing class like that.

Error: 'take' should be past participle 'taken' after 'have' (present perfect). Also reorder words to 'a professional singing class.' Suggestion: use correct past participle with perfect tenses and natural word order.

× And I also don't want to spend time, spend money on that.

✓ And I also don't want to spend time or money on that.

Repeating 'spend' is awkward; use 'or' to connect two objects of 'spend.' Suggestion: use conjunctions properly when listing things not wanted.

× To be honest I don't want to sin for anyone.

✓ To be honest, I don't want to sing for anyone.

Typos: 'sin' should be 'sing.' Also add comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: proofread for typos that change meaning.

× When I was younger in school I just since because I was chosen to perform on special day like Christmas Day, spa day.

✓ When I was younger at school I just sang because I was chosen to perform on special days like Christmas Day or Sports Day.

Problems: 'since' misused; tense 'just since' incorrect—should be past 'sang' for past habit; 'spa day' likely intended 'Sports Day'; preposition 'at school' better. Suggestion: use past simple for past repeated actions and correct event names.

× I just seems because to just to join the activity just join the school events.

✓ I just joined to take part in school events and activities.

Sentence has many redundancies and incorrect verb form 'seems.' Use past tense 'joined' or 'participated' and concise phrasing 'take part in school events.' Suggestion: remove repeated words and choose a clear verb.

× I think singing is one of the most happiness activity for everyone because they can express their emotion, their their feelings.

✓ I think singing is one of the happiest activities for everyone because they can express their emotions and feelings.

Errors: 'most happiness' should be adjective 'happiest'; 'activity' should be plural 'activities'; 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions'; duplicated 'their.' Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and plural nouns when appropriate.

× And I see people around me enjoy singing when people gathering together or drinking.

✓ And I see people around me enjoying singing when they gather together or drink.

Verb forms: use gerund 'enjoying' after 'see' (in this context progressive observation) and 'gather' needs correct tense 'gather' with plural subject; add pronoun 'they.' Suggestion: ensure verbs agree and use gerunds after 'see' for ongoing actions.

× Yes to be honest I'm not good at singing like my boy is not that good so uh I often listen to my friends or people are singing like before my ex-boyfriend always seems for me so I.

✓ Yes, to be honest, I'm not good at singing; my boyfriend isn't that good either, so I often listen to my friends or other people singing. My ex-boyfriend used to sing for me sometimes.

Multiple issues: missing commas, awkward phrasing 'my boy' should be 'my boyfriend'; 'people are singing' incorrect order — use 'people singing'; 'always seems for me' unclear — likely 'used to sing for me.' Suggestion: use clear subjects and verbs, correct word order, and appropriate tense for habitual past actions.

× No, I've never taken any uh, singing class and I want acting as well because uh, I don't like it like 100% so I don't wanna spend time and money on that.

✓ No, I've never taken any singing classes, and I want to act as well, but I'm not 100% interested, so I don't want to spend time and money on that.

Errors: 'singing class' plural 'classes' more natural after 'any'; 'want acting' should be 'want to act'; 'wanna' is informal—use 'want to'; tense and phrasing adjusted. Suggestion: use infinitive after 'want,' avoid informal contractions in formal speech, and match number for countable nouns.

× I prefer more in dancing class. I enjoy more dancing.

✓ I prefer dance classes. I enjoy dancing more.

'Prefer more in' is incorrect phrasing. Use 'prefer' + noun: 'prefer dance classes.' Place 'more' after the verb 'enjoy' or use 'prefer X to Y.' Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'prefer dance classes' and position 'more' correctly.