Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but you should correct grammar mistakes and avoid redundancy. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about your feelings.

例: Yes, I like singing because it is my passion. Whenever I feel lonely or down, I start singing, and it instantly lifts my spirits and makes me feel amazing.

提案: Your answer is clear but repetitive. Use linking words to make your response coherent and avoid repeating the same words. Also, correct minor grammar errors.

例: No, I have not taken formal lessons, but I have taught myself to sing through practice and learning from my mistakes over time.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and structured. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

例: Usually, I sing for myself to lift my mood. However, if I get a chance, I would love to sing for my friends to make them happy.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains grammar mistakes and redundancy. Use linking words and more precise vocabulary to express your ideas clearly.

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness because it lifts people's moods and makes them feel joyful, whether they are singing or listening to songs.

× Yes I do like singing becaused it's my passion.

✓ Yes, I do like singing because it's my passion.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; the correct word is 'because'. This is a spelling error, not a tense issue, but it affects sentence clarity. Also, a comma is needed after 'Yes' for correct punctuation.

× Whenever I feel lonely or whenever I feel like funk I start to sing an yeah it feels amaze.

✓ Whenever I feel lonely or whenever I feel like funk, I start to sing and yeah, it feels amazing.

The word 'amaze' is an adjective form used incorrectly here; the correct form is 'amazing' (an adjective) to describe the feeling. Also, 'an' should be 'and'. Commas are added for clarity.

× No, I have not learned how to sing, but I have learned it from myself while singing and singing.

✓ No, I have not learned how to sing, but I have taught myself while singing.

The phrase 'learned it from myself' is awkward; 'taught myself' is the correct expression. Also, repeating 'singing and singing' is redundant.

× I learned it by myself, with my mistakes an by practice.

✓ I learned it by myself, through my mistakes and by practice.

The preposition 'with' is incorrect here; 'through' is appropriate to indicate the means by which learning happened. Also, 'an' should be 'and'.

× Usually I don't sing for anyone. Uh, I always sing for myself to feel or to lift my mood.

✓ Usually, I don't sing for anyone. Uh, I always sing for myself to feel better or to lift my mood.

The phrase 'to feel' is incomplete; it should be 'to feel better' to make sense. Also, a comma after 'Usually' improves readability.

× But if I ever get a chance to sing for someone I'll probably do for it for my friends.

✓ But if I ever get a chance to sing for someone, I'll probably do it for my friends.

The phrase 'do for it for my friends' is incorrect; it should be 'do it for my friends'. Also, a comma is needed after the conditional clause.

× Yes, singing can bring happiness to the people becauses it helps to lift the mood of the people and make them feel joy pleasant while singing or listening to songs.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because it helps lift their mood and makes them feel joyful and pleasant while singing or listening to songs.

The phrase 'make them feel joy pleasant' is incorrect; it should be 'makes them feel joyful and pleasant'. Also, 'becauses' is a spelling error for 'because'. 'The people' is changed to 'people' for natural usage.

× Yeah, it do make them happy.

✓ Yeah, it does make them happy.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'does' instead of 'do' to agree in number.