Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains several spelling and grammar mistakes that affect naturalness and clarity. Try to use correct spelling (e.g., 'emotional' instead of 'motional', 'alone' instead of 'alon', 'R&B' instead of 'RNM') and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing, especially when I'm alone or with close friends. It helps me relax and express my emotions. Although I'm not a professional singer, I often sing along to my favorite R&B songs because they have soothing melodies.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many grammar and vocabulary errors. Use correct phrases like 'singing lessons' instead of 'former singing relations' and 'pop music' instead of 'so pop music'. Also, avoid sentence fragments and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Try to provide more specific details about your experience or plans.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons, but I enjoy singing in my free time. Usually, I sing alone to my favorite R&B and pop songs. I have thought about joining a singing class just for fun, but I haven't done it yet.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Use correct expressions like 'comfortable' instead of 'confortable' and clarify your ideas. Avoid incomplete sentences and try to explain why you prefer singing for close people. Use linking words to connect your thoughts logically.

例: I like to sing for my close friends and family because I feel comfortable around them. They always support me and encourage me to improve. Although I'm not a professional singer, singing for people I care about makes the experience more meaningful. I hope to perform simply for them one day.

提案: Your answer shows good ideas but is hard to understand because of incorrect words and grammar errors. Use correct vocabulary such as 'express emotions' instead of 'express emotional', and 'reduce stress' instead of 'reduced sprays'. Also, avoid sentence fragments and use linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I definitely think singing can bring happiness to people. It is a way to express emotions and reduce stress. Even if someone is not a good singer, singing a favorite song can lift their mood. For example, when people sing together at celebrations, it creates a joyful and energetic atmosphere.

× I find it very relaxing and it helps me express my motional.

✓ I find it very relaxing and it helps me express my emotions.

The word 'motional' is incorrect; the correct noun form is 'emotions'. Use 'emotions' to refer to feelings, which fits the context here.

× I'm not or professional singer but often sing alon to my favorite songs, specially RNM music.

✓ I'm not a professional singer but often sing alone to my favorite songs, especially R&B music.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'or' should be 'a' to indicate singular article; 'alon' should be 'alone'; 'specially' should be 'especially'; 'RNM' is likely a typo for 'R&B'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× No, I have never taken the former singing relations, but I've always enjoyed singing.

✓ No, I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I've always enjoyed singing.

'Former singing relations' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'formal singing lessons'. Also, 'lessons' is plural and fits the context of learning to sing.

× In my free time. I usually sing alone to my favorite song, especially R&B or so pop music.

✓ In my free time, I usually sing alone to my favorite songs, especially R&B or pop music.

'Song' should be plural 'songs' because it refers to multiple songs. Also, 'or so pop music' is incorrect; 'or pop music' is correct.

× I have told about drinking or singing class just for fun, but I have never have.

✓ I have thought about taking singing classes just for fun, but I have never done so.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Told about drinking or singing class' is incorrect; likely intended 'thought about taking singing classes'. Also, 'never have' is incomplete; 'never done so' completes the idea.

× I like to sing for my close friends or family members because I feel confortable around them.

✓ I like to sing for my close friends or family members because I feel comfortable around them.

The word 'confortable' is a misspelling; the correct spelling is 'comfortable'.

× They always record is meat even truth.

✓ They always record it, even the truth.

'Is meat' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'it'. Correct pronoun 'it' should be used to refer to what they record.

× I am not a professional singer singing for people I care about to make the experience more meaningful and form one day I also. Come to sing at a simple.

✓ I am not a professional singer, but I sing for people I care about to make the experience more meaningful. One day, I also want to sing simply.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding conjunctions and restructuring improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I definitely think singing can make people happy.

✓ Yes, I definitely think singing can make people happy.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× It's a way to express emotional and reduced sprays.

✓ It's a way to express emotions and reduce stress.

'Emotional' should be the noun 'emotions'; 'reduced sprays' is incorrect and likely meant 'reduce stress'.

× Even if someone isn't a good singer, just singing the ERP riversong lift your mood.

✓ Even if someone isn't a good singer, just singing the right song lifts your mood.

'ERP riversong' is unclear; likely 'right song'. Also, subject-verb agreement: 'lifts' matches singular subject 'singing'.

× For example when people sing together. At our celebrations for concerted greatsword, joyful and energetic atmosphere.

✓ For example, when people sing together at our celebrations or concerts, it creates a joyful and energetic atmosphere.

The original sentences are fragments and unclear. Combining them and correcting words improves clarity and grammar.