Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but has several grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to make your sentences clear and concise, and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say: "No, I don't really like singing because I feel shy singing in front of others. Instead, I prefer listening to music as it helps me relax and enjoy without feeling nervous."

例: No, I don't really like singing because I feel shy singing in front of others. Instead, I prefer listening to music as it helps me relax and enjoy without feeling nervous.

提案: Your answer is very short and has grammatical mistakes. Try to give a complete sentence and explain your reason clearly. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, you can say: "No, I have never learnt how to sing because I feel uncomfortable singing in front of other people."

例: No, I have never learnt how to sing because I feel uncomfortable singing in front of other people.

提案: Your answer does not directly address the question and is unclear. Make sure to answer the question directly with a topic sentence and then add supporting details. For example, you can say: "I would like to sing for my family because they have always supported me. Singing for them would be a way to show my gratitude."

例: I would like to sing for my family because they have always supported me. Singing for them would be a way to show my gratitude.

提案: Your answer is good but has some grammatical errors and repetition. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas. For example, you can say: "Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress. For example, when I sing my favourite song, I often feel more relaxed and cheerful."

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress. For example, when I sing my favourite song, I often feel more relaxed and cheerful.

× No, I don't really like singing because I feel very shy when I have to single.

✓ No, I don't really like singing because I feel very shy when I have to sing.

The word 'single' is incorrect here; the correct verb form is 'sing'. 'Sing' is the base form of the verb used after 'have to'.

× Sing in front of other people.

✓ Singing in front of other people.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased as 'I feel shy singing in front of other people.'

× I paper to enjoy music by listening to it rather than singing myself as it help me relax and have.

✓ I prefer to enjoy music by listening to it rather than singing myself as it helps me relax and have fun.

'Paper' is a typo for 'prefer'. Also, 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The sentence was incomplete and needed 'fun' to complete the thought.

× Fun without feeling nervous.

✓ Fun without feeling nervous.

This is a sentence fragment. It should be combined with the previous sentence for clarity: '...helps me relax and have fun without feeling nervous.'

× No. I don't learn how to sing because I am.

✓ No. I haven't learned how to sing because I am

The present tense 'don't learn' is incorrect here; the present perfect 'haven't learned' is appropriate to indicate experience up to now.

× Feel uncomfort table in the front of other people.

✓ I feel uncomfortable in front of other people.

This is a sentence fragment missing the subject 'I'. Also, 'uncomfort table' is a misspelling of 'uncomfortable'. 'In the front of' should be 'in front of'.

× I didn't do anything for my family because my family supported me.

✓ I don't do anything for my family because my family supports me.

The question is in present tense, so the answer should also be in present tense. 'Didn't do' and 'supported' are past tense and inconsistent here.

× Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allowed them to express their emotion and relieve stairs, stairs, stairs.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress.

'Allowed' should be 'allows' to agree with present tense 'can bring'. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. 'Stairs' is a mishearing or typo for 'stress'.