Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh những câu không liên quan hoặc không rõ nghĩa như "Helpers born in in charge" và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và logic hơn.

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress after a busy day. For instance, I often sing with my friends in a choir, which makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và phát âm chính xác hơn, tránh lặp từ như "regularly regularly". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn để người nghe dễ hiểu.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a student because it was part of the school curriculum. I also practice singing regularly at home to improve my skills and enjoy music more.

提案: Bạn nên tránh những cụm từ không phù hợp như "a ninja performing" và chú ý đến số nhiều của danh từ như "feedback". Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I want to sing for my friends and family because they always support and encourage my musical talent. Singing for them makes me feel happy, relaxed, and confident. Their positive feedback motivates me to perform even better.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp như "An emergency and music". Bạn nên tập trung vào việc trả lời rõ ràng, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng chính xác để truyền đạt ý tưởng hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it is a great way to express emotions and relieve stress. It helps people feel happier, freer, and more relaxed.

× Yes, I love singing because it's a great way for me to express my emotion and relieve stress after a busy day.

✓ Yes, I love singing because it's a great way for me to express my emotions and relieve stress after a busy day.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because it refers to various feelings, not just one. In English, when talking about feelings in general, the plural form is used.

× For example, I often spend time with my friends singing choral key, which makes me feel happy and relaxed singing together.

✓ For example, I often spend time singing in a choir with my friends, which makes me feel happy and relaxed when singing together.

The phrase 'singing choral key' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'singing in a choir'. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity and natural flow.

× Helpers born in in charge.

This sentence is incomplete and unclear, so it cannot be corrected without additional context.

× Yes, I learn how to sing when I was a student because his word part of school curriculum.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a student because it was part of the school curriculum.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to match the past time frame. Also, 'his word part' is incorrect; it should be 'it was part'. This corrects both tense and sentence structure.

× I also practice singing regularly regularly at home to improve my skills and enjoy music more.

✓ I also practice singing regularly at home to improve my skills and enjoy music more.

The word 'regularly' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing the repetition improves sentence clarity.

× I want to sing for my friends and family because they always support and encourage my musical talent.

✓ I want to sing for my friends and family because they always support and encourage my musical talent.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Their positive feedbacks motivate me to improve a ninja performing even more.

✓ Their positive feedback motivates me to improve my performance even more.

The word 'feedback' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'feedbacks'. Also, 'a ninja performing' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'my performance'. This corrects pluralization and sentence clarity.

× Yes, singing can bring joy to many because that is great way to express their emotion and relieve stress and they can feel happier, freedom, more relaxed.

✓ Yes, singing can bring joy to many because it is a great way to express their emotions and relieve stress, and they can feel happier, freer, and more relaxed.

'That is great way' should be 'it is a great way' with the article 'a'. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. 'Freedom' is a noun but should be the adjective 'freer' to match the other adjectives. The sentence is corrected for article use, pluralization, and adjective form.