Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and coherent by avoiding repetition and using linking words. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure will improve clarity. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your feelings with specific reasons and link your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like singing, although I don't do it often because I'm not very confident in my ability. However, I find singing a great way to express my feelings and release energy.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'um' and unclear phrases such as 'I'm at that tongue'. Make your answer more structured by giving a clear response and supporting it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing formally, but I would like to if I get the chance because I want to improve my confidence and skills.

提案: Focus on clear and correct sentence structure. Avoid unclear phrases like 'lie to sync' and '2 LB family member'. Use linking words to explain your ideas logically and provide specific details.

例: Although I'm not confident in my singing, I would like to sing for my partner and family because singing helps me express my feelings and strengthens our connection.

提案: Improve your answer by avoiding repetition and unclear phrases like 'Brenda happy'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons why singing brings happiness.

例: Yes, definitely. Singing is a great way to release energy and emotions, which can make people feel happier and more relaxed.

× I like singing but I am not often.

✓ I like singing but I do not sing often.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I am not often' which is not a proper present tense expression for frequency. The correct form is 'I do not sing often' to express frequency of the action in present tense.

× But for me singing is good.

✓ But for me, singing is good.

A comma is needed after 'for me' to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause, improving sentence clarity.

× Quiet expressed, the feeling, the emotion and release the energy inside.

✓ It quietly expresses the feeling, the emotion, and releases the energy inside.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a clear subject and verb agreement. The correction provides a proper subject 'It' and verb forms to make a complete sentence.

× No, I haven't, uh, learned how to sing, but if I have a chance I would like to learn.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing, but if I have a chance, I would like to learn.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma after 'chance' for proper sentence structure and clarity.

× Even I am not confident in my singing ability. Uhm, yeah, because I'm at that tongue.

✓ Even though I am not confident in my singing ability, uhm, yeah, because I'm at that stage.

The phrase 'Even I am not confident' is incomplete and should be 'Even though I am not confident' to express contrast. 'I'm at that tongue' is unclear; likely intended 'I'm at that stage' to indicate current status.

× Even that I am not confident in my singing ability, I could lie to sync to my partner to my family becaused it's a good quite spread the feeling the emotion to them.

✓ Even though I am not confident in my singing ability, I could like to sing to my partner and my family because it's a good way to spread the feeling and the emotion to them.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'Even that' should be 'Even though' for correct conjunction use; 'lie to sync' is incorrect and should be 'like to sing'; 'becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'; 'quite spread' should be 'good way to spread'; and missing conjunctions and articles corrected for clarity.

× Singing can bring a deep connection between a 2 LB family member.

✓ Singing can bring a deep connection between two or more family members.

'a 2 LB family member' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It should be 'two or more family members' to correctly express plural and clarity.

× Oh yes, of course, singing can definitely can bring the happiness to people.

✓ Oh yes, of course, singing can definitely bring happiness to people.

The modal verb 'can' is repeated unnecessarily. Only one 'can' is needed before the verb 'bring'.

× I believe the singing is a good way to release energy inside an when you released anything.

✓ I believe singing is a good way to release energy inside, and when you release anything,

The definite article 'the' before 'singing' is unnecessary here. 'An' before 'when' is incorrect and removed. Also, tense consistency is needed: 'released' changed to 'release' to match present tense.

× That's a good way to Brenda happy to others.

✓ That's a good way to bring happiness to others.

The sentence contains a typo 'Brenda' which should be 'bring', and 'happy' should be 'happiness' to function as a noun. The corrected sentence is grammatically correct and clear.