Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc, có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng các từ vựng phù hợp và câu có cấu trúc đúng để truyền đạt ý tưởng một cách tự nhiên.

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Sometimes, I don't even need to understand the lyrics; just listening to the melody lifts my mood.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc hơn.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I enjoy humming along to music in my free time. For me, singing is about expressing my feelings, not being perfect.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản và rõ ràng, đồng thời sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: First, I want to sing for myself because it helps me relax. Then, I would like to sing for people I care about, even if there is no stage, just knowing they are listening makes me happy.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp, làm cho ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và từ vựng phù hợp để diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people release emotions and connect with others. Cheerful songs or family songs can make a good day even better.

× Yes, I realize singing to me music is like her girlfriends when I'm happy is make me want to dance and it would have served is confirmed me sometime I don't even need to understand all the lyrics, just hearing the melody can came my hurt.

✓ Yes, I realize singing to me is like having girlfriends; when I'm happy, it makes me want to dance, and sometimes it comforts me. I don't even need to understand all the lyrics; just hearing the melody can calm my heart.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper sentence structure, making it difficult to understand. It contains run-on sentences and incorrect word choices. The correction breaks it into clear, grammatically correct sentences and uses appropriate vocabulary to convey the intended meaning.

× To be honest I have never taken formers Englishing but allow huming along to music.

✓ To be honest, I have never taken formal singing lessons but allow humming along to music.

The phrase 'taken formers Englishing' is incorrect; it should be 'taken formal singing lessons'. Also, 'allow huming' is incorrect; it should be 'allow humming'. Prepositions and word forms are corrected to make the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× They have free time for me.

✓ I have free time for it.

The pronoun 'They' is incorrectly used here; the subject should be 'I' referring to the speaker, and 'it' refers to singing or music. The correction aligns pronouns properly with their antecedents.

× Singing doesn't have to be perfect, it just had too much how I feel.

✓ Singing doesn't have to be perfect; it just has to express how I feel.

The phrase 'had too much how I feel' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'has to express how I feel'. The verb form and word choice are corrected to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× 1st I want to sing for myself because sometimes I'm my our touches audience.

✓ First, I want to sing for myself because sometimes I touch my own emotions.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and contains unclear phrases like 'I'm my our touches audience'. The correction clarifies the meaning by using correct pronouns and expressions.

× Then I want to sing for the personal if no need for a stage, just knowing they listen is enough.

✓ Then I want to sing for people; there is no need for a stage, just knowing they listen is enough.

'The personal' is incorrect; it should be 'people'. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.

× I think he's just singing not only have released yet but I'm still connect people through shame motion.

✓ I think singing not only releases emotions but also connects people through shared feelings.

The original sentence misuses pronouns ('he's') and has unclear phrases ('shame motion'). The correction removes incorrect pronouns and clarifies the intended meaning with proper vocabulary.

× But cheerful melody or a family song can make even the good day feel better.

✓ But a cheerful melody or a familiar song can make even a bad day feel better.

'Family song' is likely a mistake for 'familiar song', and 'good day' should be 'bad day' to make sense in context. The adjectives are corrected to convey the intended meaning.