Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct vocabulary and grammar. For example, use 'singing' instead of 'seeing', and maintain consistent tense. Also, make your answer more natural and clear by explaining your feelings briefly.

例: I like singing, but I prefer to do it alone because I often feel nervous when performing in front of others.

提案: Avoid contradictory statements and incorrect grammar. Use simple and clear sentences to express your experience. For example, say whether you have learnt singing or not, and explain briefly.

例: I haven't taken any formal singing lessons because I feel I already know how to sing.

提案: Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Instead of 'see for myself', say 'sing for myself'. Combine short sentences to improve fluency and coherence.

例: I would like to sing for myself because I feel too nervous to perform in front of others.

提案: Clarify your ideas and use more precise vocabulary. Explain how singing affects emotions clearly and avoid confusing statements.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because a good song can relax you or make you feel excited.

× I like seeing but not in front of others or on stage because I always felt nervous.

✓ I like singing but not in front of others or on stage because I always feel nervous.

The verb 'seeing' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'singing' to match the context. Also, 'felt' should be 'feel' to maintain present tense consistency with 'like'. The present participle 'singing' is used to express the activity you enjoy.

× I haven't learned yet because I already did knew how to do it.

✓ I haven't learned yet because I already knew how to do it.

The phrase 'did knew' is incorrect; 'did' is auxiliary for past tense and should be followed by the base verb 'know'. Using both 'did' and 'knew' together is redundant. The correct past tense form is 'knew' without 'did'.

× I would like to see for myself. I don't want to sing to others. Because of I'm too nervous.

✓ I would like to sing for myself. I don't want to sing for others because I'm too nervous.

The phrase 'see for myself' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'sing for myself'. Also, 'Because of I'm too nervous' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'because I'm too nervous' without 'of'. The preposition 'for' is used with 'sing' when indicating the audience.

× Yes, a good voice could make you sleep or make you feel excited.

✓ Yes, a good voice could help you sleep or make you feel excited.

The verb 'make' is not appropriate with 'sleep' here; 'help you sleep' is the correct collocation. 'Make you feel excited' is correct. Using 'help' instead of 'make' with 'sleep' is more natural and grammatically correct.