Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse manque de clarté et de structure. Essayez d'utiliser des phrases complètes et évitez les mots incorrects comme "kill" et "omniverse". Utilisez des mots simples et précis pour exprimer vos idées clairement.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and reduce stress. Moreover, I feel a sense of achievement when I manage to sing a difficult song successfully.

提案: Votre réponse est confuse et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Essayez de répondre directement et de manière claire, en expliquant pourquoi vous n'avez pas pris de cours de chant.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because they are usually very expensive, and I cannot afford them. I only sing for my own enjoyment.

提案: Votre réponse est correcte mais un peu courte et manque de fluidité. Utilisez des phrases complètes et des mots plus appropriés pour exprimer vos idées.

例: I prefer to sing for myself because it helps me relax. I don't think others would enjoy my singing, so I keep it as a personal hobby.

提案: Votre réponse est pertinente mais manque de fluidité et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Essayez d'utiliser des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus cohérente.

例: Well, I think it depends on the person. Some people find singing or listening to music very enjoyable and it brings them happiness, but others may not feel the same way.

× Yes I'm kill sing for me sing makes me relaxed while omniverse thing can make me come down and.

✓ Yes, I like singing because singing makes me relaxed while various things can calm me down.

The original sentence misuses 'kill sing' which seems to be a typo or incorrect phrase. The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund form 'singing' to express enjoyment. Also, 'omniverse thing' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'various things' fits better. 'Come down' should be 'calm me down' to express relaxation. Use of gerund after 'like' is standard in English.

× It also gives me a sense of fulfillment when I complete a difficult song.

✓ It also gives me a sense of fulfillment when I complete a difficult song.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× No, I haven't attended any course of thing.

✓ No, I haven't attended any course or anything.

The phrase 'course of thing' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'course or anything' to express that the student has not attended any course or similar activity. Also, 'haven't attended' is correct present perfect tense to indicate experience up to now.

× Because it always be exorbitantly high the price I can't afford it.

✓ Because the price is always exorbitantly high, I can't afford it.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'be' instead of 'is' for the present tense third person singular. The sentence structure is also awkward; placing 'the price' before the verb and adding a comma improves clarity. 'Is' is the correct verb form here.

× I just seen.

✓ I just see it as out of my interest.

'Seen' is the past participle and requires an auxiliary verb like 'have' to be correct. The intended meaning seems to be 'I just see it as out of my interest' or 'I just do it out of my interest.' The original sentence is incomplete and unclear.

× I just want to sing for myself because it's a way of relaxation and.

✓ I just want to sing for myself because it's a way of relaxation.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly. The rest is grammatically correct.

× I don't think others will enjoy my thing.

✓ I don't think others will enjoy my singing.

'My thing' is vague and informal. Replacing it with 'my singing' clarifies the meaning and is more appropriate in this context.

× Well as far as I am concerned it depends because not all people enjoy sing or listen to music.

✓ Well, as far as I am concerned, it depends because not all people enjoy singing or listening to music.

After 'enjoy,' the gerund form of the verb should be used ('singing' instead of 'sing'). Similarly, 'listen' should be 'listening' to maintain parallel structure.

× So for some people. Sing maybe may bring happiness to them, but for others it is not certain.

✓ So for some people, singing may bring happiness to them, but for others it is not certain.

'Sing' should be in gerund form 'singing' to function as a noun here. Also, 'maybe may' is redundant; 'may' alone suffices. The sentence structure is improved by combining the fragments.