Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid irrelevant information, and keep your answer concise and natural. For example, explain why you like singing and when you usually sing.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. I usually sing in my free time at home, which makes me feel happy and refreshed.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing. When I was in 12th grade, I joined a singing class and learned from my teacher. Since then, my interest in singing has grown a lot.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence and provide specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence.

例: I want to sing for my grandfather because he is a great singer and appreciates classical and lyrical songs. Singing for him would be a special way to show my respect and love.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Provide a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and examples using linking words to make your answer logical and natural.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps improve mood when someone feels sad. For example, listening to cheerful songs or singing funny songs at home can lift spirits and reduce stress.

× Of course I like the singing becauses in singing my interest most off and I'd like it sinking in my free time.

✓ Of course I like singing because it interests me the most and I'd like doing it in my free time.

The phrase 'the singing' is incorrect here; 'singing' as a general activity does not need 'the'. 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'My interest most off' is incorrect; it should be 'it interests me the most'. 'I'd like it sinking' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I'd like doing it'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I am cooker food.

✓ I cook food.

The original sentence uses 'am cooker food' which is incorrect. The correct verb form is 'cook' to express the action. 'I cook food' is a simple present tense sentence indicating a habitual action.

× I sing songs.

✓ I sing songs.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× Yes definitely I have to learn to how to sing but I join a class is my few in when I was a 12th in standard and I learn a singing to my perspective teacher.

✓ Yes, definitely I learned how to sing. I joined a class when I was in 12th standard and learned singing from my respective teacher.

The original sentence incorrectly uses present tense verbs 'have to learn', 'join', and 'learn' when referring to past events. The correct past tense forms are 'learned' and 'joined'. 'My few in' is unclear and replaced with 'when I was in 12th standard'. 'Perspective teacher' is corrected to 'respective teacher'.

× That's why I like singing and interest the most often in the singing.

✓ That's why I like singing and am most interested in it.

The phrase 'interest the most often in the singing' is awkward and incorrect. The correction uses 'am most interested in it' to express preference clearly and grammatically.

× Up my respective Gran father also a single good singer, her voice is the well and good and him voices are well and good in every situation and that's why my Gran father want to a sink for in the any classical and lyrics.

✓ My respected grandfather is also a good singer. His voice is very good in every situation, and that's why my grandfather wants to sing classical songs and lyrics.

The original sentence misuses pronouns 'her' and 'him' for grandfather, which should be 'his'. 'Gran father' is corrected to 'grandfather'. 'Want to a sink for in the any classical and lyrics' is corrected to 'wants to sing classical songs and lyrics' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× That's why my Gran father want to a sink for in the any classical and lyrics.

✓ That's why my grandfather wants to sing classical songs and lyrics.

The verb 'want' should be in third person singular form 'wants' to agree with 'my grandfather'. 'A sink for in the any' is incorrect and corrected to 'to sing classical songs and lyrics'.

× Yes definitely singing can bring happiness to the people becauses in a mood of sad nature and we can listen to music and singing in the home.

✓ Yes, definitely singing can bring happiness to people because when we are sad, we can listen to music and sing at home.

'To the people' is better as 'to people' for generalization. 'Becauses in a mood of sad nature' is incorrect; corrected to 'because when we are sad'. 'Singing in the home' is better expressed as 'sing at home'.

× Comedian singing and a funny jokes typer singing in a free time.

✓ Comedic singing and funny joke-type singing in free time.

'Comedian singing' is corrected to 'comedic singing' to use the adjective form. 'A funny jokes typer singing' is unclear and corrected to 'funny joke-type singing' to describe the style. 'In a free time' is corrected to 'in free time'.

× That's why I also mood swings and singing can bring the happiness a lot.

✓ That's why when I have mood swings, singing can bring me a lot of happiness.

The original sentence lacks proper structure. 'I also mood swings' is incorrect; it is corrected to 'when I have mood swings'. 'Bring the happiness a lot' is corrected to 'bring me a lot of happiness' for clarity and grammatical correctness.