Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'I frequently do not seem songs', say 'I don't often sing songs'. Also, explain your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your thoughts.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me reduce stress. However, I don't often sing because I think my voice is not very pleasant.

提案: Your answer is short and has grammatical mistakes. Try to form complete sentences and connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'No, I have not learned. To sing songs because...', say 'No, I have never learned how to sing because...'.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because I don't think I have a pleasant voice.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has many grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas into clear sentences and use linking words. For example, explain that you prefer singing alone because you lack confidence and have not practiced singing.

例: Actually, I want to sing for myself because I am an introverted person. I cannot sing in front of others since I have never learned or practiced singing.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrases and sentence fragments. Try to use complete sentences and clear vocabulary. For example, explain how singing can relieve stress and help people express emotions.

例: In my opinion, singing can make people happy because it helps relieve stress and allows them to express feelings that are hard to put into words.

× I do not have sweet voice.

✓ I do not have a sweet voice.

The noun 'voice' is singular and countable, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× No, I have not learned. To sing songs because I don't feel like I have a pleasant voice.

✓ No, I have not learned to sing songs because I don't feel like I have a pleasant voice.

The sentence incorrectly separates 'I have not learned' and 'to sing songs' with a period, which breaks the sentence structure. The infinitive phrase 'to sing songs' should be connected to 'have not learned' to form a complete thought.

× Actually I want to sing for myself because I am outside person an I cannot sing. In front of other person.

✓ Actually, I want to sing for myself because I am an introverted person and I cannot sing in front of other people.

The phrase 'outside person' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'introverted person'. Also, 'other person' should be plural 'other people' to refer to multiple individuals. Additionally, the sentence fragments need to be combined properly.

× And I have never learned to sing or took any practice relations, so I cannot sing in front of others.

✓ And I have never learned to sing or taken any practice sessions, so I cannot sing in front of others.

The verb 'took' is past tense and does not fit with the present perfect 'have never learned'. The correct past participle 'taken' should be used after 'have never'. Also, 'practice relations' is incorrect; 'practice sessions' is appropriate.

× In my point of view, I think singing can make people happy as. Eat real relives. Stress. And make people just restless. And sometimes open up with lyrics. That they cannot. Express in words.

✓ In my point of view, I think singing can make people happy as it really relieves stress, makes people less restless, and sometimes helps them open up with lyrics that they cannot express in words.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper structure. Combining the ideas into a coherent sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness. Also, 'eat real relives' is incorrect and should be 'really relieves'. 'Just restless' should be 'less restless' to convey the intended meaning.