Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response to the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific reasons using linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid incomplete sentences and redundancy.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and reduces my stress. For example, when I sing my favourite songs, I feel peaceful and happy afterwards.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains irrelevant questions and repetition. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing. During my childhood, I attended singing classes where I learned the basics. It was a very exciting experience that helped me improve my skills.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and does not directly address the question. Try to give a clear topic sentence about who you want to sing for, then explain your reasons with specific details using linking words.

例: I don't have a specific person to sing for, but I would like to sing for my family because music is like medicine that reduces stress and brings happiness to them.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains incomplete sentences. Provide a clear opinion in the topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and examples using linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When you sing songs to your loved ones, it creates a special feeling that brings joy both to you and the listeners.

× Sing.

✓ I like singing.

The sentence 'Sing.' is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb to form a proper sentence. It should be corrected to 'I like singing.' to clearly express the idea.

× Music because it is very peaceful to made, it reduces stress level and.

✓ I like music because it is very peaceful to make and it reduces stress levels.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunction usage and verb form. 'to made' should be 'to make' and the sentence should be connected properly with 'and' to join the two ideas.

× It makes me very happy at the end.

✓ It makes me very happy in the end.

The phrase 'at the end' is less natural here; 'in the end' is the correct idiomatic expression to indicate a final result.

× PS I have learned.

✓ Yes, I have learned.

'PS' is incorrect in this context; the student likely meant to say 'Yes'. The sentence should be a complete affirmative response.

× Do you sing?

✓ I used to sing.

The sentence 'Do you sing?' is a question and does not fit the context. The student likely intended to say they sang in the past.

× During my childhood days have gone to singing classes and I have learned the basics of seeming.

✓ During my childhood, I went to singing classes and I learned the basics of singing.

The sentence lacks a subject before 'have gone' and uses 'seeming' instead of 'singing'. The past tense 'went' and 'learned' are appropriate here.

× It is very.

✓ It is very exciting.

The sentence is incomplete and should be completed to express the intended meaning.

× It is really exciting, exciting.

✓ It is really exciting.

The repetition of 'exciting' is unnecessary and incorrect.

× I don't have a particular.

✓ I don't have a particular song.

The sentence is incomplete and needs the object 'song' to be complete.

× Song to be dedicated to a person but overall I would like to tell that listening to music is medicine and it reduces your stress level at the maximum and I will dedicate.

✓ A song to dedicate to a person, but overall I would like to say that listening to music is like medicine; it reduces your stress level greatly, and I will dedicate songs to people.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks clarity. It needs restructuring and completion to convey the intended meaning.

× Is.

✓ Yes,

'Is.' is incomplete and does not answer the question properly. It should be replaced with 'Yes,' to affirm the statement.

× Singing can bring happiness to people.

✓ Singing can bring happiness to people.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× Can you sing songs to people who you love a lot?

✓ You can sing songs to people you love a lot.

The original sentence is a question but should be a statement to answer the previous question.

× It is a kind of feeling on the trains, a lot of happiness to you and to the person who is listening to your sibling, your voice, so I will.

✓ It is a kind of feeling that brings a lot of happiness to you and to the person who is listening to your singing voice, so I will continue.

The original sentence is confusing and contains errors like 'on the trains' and 'your sibling'. It needs to be rephrased for clarity and correctness.