Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use simpler and clearer sentences, and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'makes me relax an enjoyable', say 'helps me relax and enjoy myself'. Also, try to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I like singing when I'm alone because it helps me relax and enjoy myself. However, I don't like singing in front of others because I'm not confident in my singing skills.

提案: Your answer is too short and unclear. You should provide a complete sentence with proper grammar and more details. For example, mention when and how you learned singing. Avoid incomplete sentences and questions in your answer.

例: Yes, I have. When I was in primary school, my music teacher taught me how to sing properly.

提案: Your answer has good content but some grammar mistakes and sentence fragments. Try to combine your ideas into complete sentences and use correct prepositions. For example, say 'I appreciate her every day' instead of 'I appreciate to her'.

例: I want to sing for my mother because she enjoys listening to music, and I want to show my appreciation and respect to her by singing.

提案: Your answer is somewhat fragmented and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences complete and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'music is a good way to express emotions, and when I sing cheerful songs, I can share my energy with others.'

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because music is a good way to express our emotions. When I sing cheerful songs, I can share my energy with others.

× I like singing when I'm alone because it makes me relax an enjoyable but I don't like singing in front of others because I'm not good at singing.

✓ I like singing when I'm alone because it makes me feel relaxed and enjoy it, but I don't like singing in front of others because I'm not good at it.

The phrase 'makes me relax an enjoyable' is incorrect. After 'makes me', a verb in the base form or an object complement is expected. The correct form is 'makes me feel relaxed and enjoy it'. Also, 'singing' is repeated unnecessarily; 'good at it' is more natural.

× Yes I have. When I was primary student my music teacher taught. How to sing well?

✓ Yes, I have. When I was a primary student, my music teacher taught me how to sing well.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'primary student'. Also, 'taught' needs an object, so 'taught me' is necessary. The question 'How to sing well?' is incomplete and should be part of the previous sentence.

× I want to sing for my mother because she enjoyed listening to music and I appreciate to her every day, so I want to show my respect. For her. By singing.

✓ I want to sing for my mother because she enjoys listening to music and I appreciate her every day, so I want to show my respect to her by singing.

The verb 'appreciate' does not require the preposition 'to'; it should be 'appreciate her'. Also, 'enjoyed' should be present tense 'enjoys' to match the context. The sentence fragments should be combined for clarity.

× Yes, because I think music is good way to express our emotions and when I sing the bright music I can. Share my. Energy to others.

✓ Yes, because I think music is a good way to express our emotions, and when I sing bright music, I can share my energy with others.

The phrase 'good way' needs the article 'a'. 'The bright music' should be 'bright music' without 'the'. Also, 'share my energy to others' should be 'share my energy with others'. Sentence fragments should be combined properly.