Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing, but mostly when I am alone because I feel shy singing in front of others. However, singing helps me relax and express my emotions.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Provide a clear and direct response, use proper verb forms, and explain your situation with supporting details using linking words.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons. Although my mother encouraged me to join classes, I haven't had enough time to start learning.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains errors. Respond directly, use correct vocabulary, and explain your feelings with specific details and linking words.

例: I used to sing for my mom and sister, but since they didn't respond positively, I now prefer to sing just for myself.

提案: Your answer is somewhat relevant but contains unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Use clear vocabulary, avoid unnecessary fillers, and connect your ideas logically.

例: Of course, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express themselves and feel positive energy, as I learned from a podcast I listened to.

× Oh I think your question have a many different edge to look at.

✓ Oh I think your question has many different angles to look at.

The subject 'question' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, 'a many different edge' is incorrect; 'many' is used with plural nouns without 'a', and 'edge' should be pluralized to 'angles' to fit the meaning.

× I like a singing from myself but not to others.

✓ I like singing by myself but not for others.

The phrase 'a singing from myself' is incorrect. 'Singing' is a gerund and does not need an article 'a'. The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; 'by myself' correctly expresses doing something alone. Also, 'not to others' should be 'not for others' to indicate the intended audience.

× I don't want to sync for others, but I like singing.

✓ I don't want to sing for others, but I like singing.

The verb 'sync' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'sing'. The preposition 'for' is correct here to indicate the audience.

× No, I haven't about my mother really encourage encourages me to taking some classes and Start learning how to sync, but I am a little lack of time so I can I could.

✓ No, I haven't. My mother really encouraged me to take some classes and start learning how to sing, but I lack time, so I couldn't.

The sentence is fragmented and contains multiple errors: 'haven't' is incomplete without an object; 'encourage encourages' is redundant and incorrect tense; 'to taking' should be 'to take'; 'Start' should be lowercase; 'sync' should be 'sing'; 'I am a little lack of time' is incorrect, should be 'I lack time'; 'I can I could' is unclear, corrected to 'I couldn't' to express inability in past.

× I used to try to see for my mom or and my sister but it doesn't give me a good response so I prefer to think for myself now.

✓ I used to try to sing for my mom and my sister, but they didn't give me a good response, so I prefer to sing for myself now.

'Try to see for' is incorrect; the intended verb is likely 'sing'. 'Or and' is redundant; 'and' suffices. 'It doesn't give me' should be 'they didn't give me' to agree with plural 'mom and sister'. 'Think for myself' is incorrect; 'sing for myself' fits the context.

× One day I was listening to a podcast that it was about how singing brings a good energy and Afrikaans to yourself and I think.

✓ One day I was listening to a podcast that was about how singing brings good energy and happiness to yourself, and I think so.

The phrase 'that it was' is redundant; 'that was' suffices. 'A good energy' should be 'good energy' without 'a'. 'Afrikaans' is incorrect in this context; likely intended word is 'happiness' or 'joy'. The sentence ends abruptly; adding 'so' completes the thought.

× Uhm makes people happy when they are expressing themselves.

✓ It makes people happy when they express themselves.

The sentence lacks a clear subject; 'Uhm' is a filler and should be replaced with 'It' referring to singing. 'Are expressing' can be simplified to 'express' for clarity and conciseness.