Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: No, I don't really like singing because I feel shy and not confident when singing in front of others. However, I enjoy singing alone at home where I feel comfortable.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm cho ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, từ vựng phù hợp và trình bày ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc, có liên kết.

例: Yes, I learned singing when I was at school. It was part of the music class. Although I stopped learning because of my busy schedule, I would like to learn singing again in the future because it is a useful skill.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản và cụ thể hơn để truyền đạt ý tưởng một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: I don't have the confidence to sing for others now. But I dream that one day I can sing for my loved one because I think it would be very romantic.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rất khó hiểu do nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu có cấu trúc đơn giản để truyền đạt ý tưởng một cách hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because music can lift our mood and help us relax. Singing together can also create a sense of community and joy.

× I'm not confident about my vocalist beside am embraced when singing in front of the public and though when I'm alone I can sing comfortably by following of rim I love.

✓ I'm not confident about my voice because I feel embarrassed when singing in front of the public, though when I'm alone I can sing comfortably by following the rhythm I love.

The phrase 'confident about my vocalist beside am embraced' is incorrect. 'Confident about' should be followed by 'my voice' not 'vocalist'. 'Beside am embraced' is incorrect; it should be 'because I feel embarrassed'. 'Following of rim' should be 'following the rhythm'. The prepositions 'about', 'beside', and 'of' are misused here, leading to confusion.

× Oh, if I remember exactly when I worked at Ranger School music while one after compulsory subject.

✓ Oh, if I remember exactly, when I worked at Ranger School, music was a compulsory subject.

The sentence lacks proper past tense verb forms and structure. 'Music while one after compulsory subject' is incorrect. It should be 'music was a compulsory subject'. The verb 'was' is needed to indicate past tense and correct sentence structure.

× In the lesson I will talk how to sing a song and how to fill the grim.

✓ In the lesson, I was taught how to sing a song and how to feel the rhythm.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'I will talk' should be 'I was taught' to reflect past learning. 'Fill the grim' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'feel the rhythm'. The sentence needs rephrasing for clarity and correct tense.

× Now because of the heavy sketcher, music is removed from my scone subject.

✓ Now, because of the heavy schedule, music has been removed from my school subjects.

'Heavy sketcher' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'heavy schedule'. 'Scone subject' should be 'school subjects'. The preposition 'from' is correct but the nouns are incorrect, leading to confusion.

× However, if I have a chain, I will learn to focal I because I think learning a skill.

✓ However, if I have a chance, I will learn to vocalize because I think learning is a skill.

'If I have a chain' should be 'if I have a chance'. 'Learn to focal I' is incorrect; it should be 'learn to vocalize'. The modal verb 'will' is used correctly to express future intention. The sentence needs correction for word choice and clarity.

× No I don't have the confidence to sing for someone.

✓ No, I don't have the confidence to sing for anyone.

'Someone' is less appropriate here; 'anyone' fits better in negative sentences. Adding a comma after 'No' improves clarity.

× However I only dream about one day I can sing for my beloved 1 and I think it really romantic end.

✓ However, I only dream that one day I can sing for my beloved, and I think it would be really romantic.

'Dream about one day I can sing' should be 'dream that one day I can sing'. 'Beloved 1' is incorrect; 'beloved' suffices. 'Really romantic end' is awkward; 'really romantic' is better. The sentence needs proper conjunctions and adjective use.

× It will have a 2 stranded out loud.

✓ It will have two strands sung out loud.

'2 stranded' is incorrect; it should be 'two strands'. The phrase 'out loud' is correct but the sentence is unclear and needs rephrasing for meaning.

× Maybe yes, you know, take music away to really and unfit for stop moving the feeling of happiness to us, and therefore assemble many bubles in this hour, our cattle live the most, besides singing away, too afraid our emotion and unwind and never went in together, we can write a scene of community.

✓ Maybe yes, you know, music really helps to move the feeling of happiness to us, and therefore assembles many bubbles in this hour. Our daily lives are the most affected. Besides singing away, it helps us express our emotions, unwind, and come together. We can create a sense of community.

The original sentence is very unclear with many incorrect prepositions and word choices. 'Take music away to really and unfit for stop moving' is incorrect. 'Assemble many bubles' should be 'assembles many bubbles'. 'Our cattle live the most' is likely 'our daily lives are most affected'. The sentence needs to be broken down and rephrased for clarity and correct preposition use.