Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it has grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and focus on directly answering the question with supporting details.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it allows people to express their emotions and thoughts. Singing helps me relax and reduces my stress after a long day. I find it to be a great way to connect with my feelings.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains confusing phrases. Focus on giving a clear and direct response. Use simple sentences and correct grammar. Also, avoid unnecessary repetition and make sure your answer is coherent.

例: No, I have never had formal singing lessons because it was not offered at my school. However, I would like to learn how to sing in the future if I get the opportunity.

提案: Your answer has good content but is quite long and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I would like to sing for my parents because they motivate and support me. They have taught me how to express my emotions through singing, so singing for them would be a way to show my gratitude.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrases. Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it improves both mental and physical health. For example, singing can reduce stress after a busy day and help people feel more relaxed and joyful.

× I definitely like singing becauses I like the way that people show their emotions, expressed their thoughts while singing and that is probably the most unimportant important reason for someone having a stress Buster life.

✓ I definitely like singing because I like the way that people show their emotions, express their thoughts while singing, and that is probably the most important reason for someone having a stress-buster life.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because' (conjunction). Also, 'expressed' should be in present tense 'express' to match the ongoing action. The phrase 'most unimportant important reason' is contradictory; 'most important reason' is correct. Additionally, 'stress Buster' should be hyphenated as 'stress-buster' to form a compound noun.

× I definitely like singing becauses I like the way that people show their emotions, expressed their thoughts while singing and that is probably the most unimportant important reason for someone having a stress Buster life.

✓ I definitely like singing because I like the way that people show their emotions, express their thoughts while singing, and that is probably the most important reason for someone having a stress-buster life.

The verb 'expressed' is in past tense, but the sentence describes a general truth or habitual action, so the present tense 'express' is appropriate.

× I haven't had any chance to learn how to sing because it there was a not a culinary part of part of singing while I was in primary school.

✓ I haven't had any chance to learn how to sing because there was not a compulsory part of singing while I was in primary school.

The phrase 'because it there was a not a culinary part of part of singing' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'because there was not a compulsory part of singing' to convey the intended meaning. 'Culinary' is incorrect here; 'compulsory' fits the context.

× But in future if I get a chance I will definitely have to have it.

✓ But in the future, if I get a chance, I will definitely take it.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'have to have it' is awkward; 'take it' or 'learn it' is clearer. Commas are added for clarity.

× If I get a chance to sing for it, it will most probably my parents becaused they are the one who or motivates me, who always push me for my out of my comfort level and they always teach me how to sing, how to share your thoughts, how to express your emotions and that is the reason I will sing for them.

✓ If I get a chance to sing, it will most probably be for my parents because they are the ones who motivate me, who always push me out of my comfort zone, and they always teach me how to sing, how to share my thoughts, how to express my emotions, and that is the reason I will sing for them.

The sentence has several pronoun errors: 'sing for it' should be 'sing'; 'becaused' should be 'because'; 'they are the one' should be 'they are the ones'; 'or motivates' should be 'motivate'; 'push me for my out of my comfort level' is incorrect and should be 'push me out of my comfort zone'; 'your thoughts' and 'your emotions' should be 'my thoughts' and 'my emotions' to maintain consistency with the speaker's perspective.

× Definitely singing can bring happiness to most of the two most of the people becauses it helps a lot in maintaining our mental as well as physical health.

✓ Definitely, singing can bring happiness to most people because it helps a lot in maintaining our mental as well as physical health.

The phrase 'most of the two most of the people' is incorrect and redundant. It should be simplified to 'most people'. Also, 'becauses' should be 'because'.

× And it is like a stress Buster when you're having a bad day or a busy day and at the end of the day after singing you feel much more relaxed.

✓ It is like a stress-buster when you're having a bad or busy day, and at the end of the day, after singing, you feel much more relaxed.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal; it is better to start directly. 'stress Buster' should be hyphenated as 'stress-buster'. Commas are added for clarity and correct sentence flow.