Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như phát âm không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy cố gắng giữ câu trả lời trong khoảng 3-5 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I like singing very much because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Although I'm not a professional singer, I enjoy singing my favorite songs in my free time.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh ngắt quãng và lặp lại từ không cần thiết. Sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời có tính liên kết và logic hơn. Đồng thời, hãy dùng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: 'sing' thay vì 'sync').

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I usually sing naturally because I enjoy it, especially songs that I love.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần sắp xếp lại câu để rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề và các câu bổ trợ có liên kết với nhau. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn.

例: I prefer to sing for myself because I am quite shy and not very outgoing. Sometimes, I also sing for my boyfriend, but I don't like singing in front of large audiences.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng cần chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp, đồng thời tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và dùng từ vựng phong phú, chính xác hơn để thể hiện ý tưởng rõ ràng.

例: Yes, I strongly believe that singing brings happiness and joy to people. Music is an essential part of life, and it can uplift anyone's mood and make life more enjoyable.

× I think everybody loves singing an I'm not a description because I love singing a lot, but I'm not a good singer because my voice is not really strong in my vocal is not good.

✓ I think everybody loves singing and I'm not an exception because I love singing a lot, but I'm not a good singer because my voice is not really strong and my vocal is not good.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'an' instead of 'and' and 'description' instead of 'exception'. The conjunction 'and' is used to connect two ideas, and 'exception' is the correct noun to express that the speaker is not different from others. Also, 'in my vocal' is incorrect; it should be 'and my vocal'. Suggestion: Use correct conjunctions and appropriate nouns to convey meaning clearly.

× my voice is not really strong in my vocal is not good.

✓ my voice is not really strong and my vocal is not good.

The phrase 'in my vocal' is incorrect because 'in' is not the appropriate preposition here. The sentence intends to connect two related ideas, so 'and' is the correct conjunction to use. Suggestion: Use conjunctions like 'and' to connect related clauses instead of incorrect prepositions.

× Actually, I have never learned how to sync properly.

✓ Actually, I have never learned how to sing properly.

The word 'sync' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'sing'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar tense issue, but since it affects the verb form, it is corrected here. Suggestion: Use the correct verb 'sing' when referring to the act of producing musical sounds with the voice.

× I just. It was I just sing on my natural habit.

✓ I just sing naturally as a habit.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'I just. It was I just sing on my natural habit.' is not a proper sentence structure. The correction combines the ideas into a clear, grammatically correct sentence. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments and ensure sentences have a clear subject and predicate.

× I just. Simply saying what I like to sing and to the song that I love.

✓ I just simply sing what I like and the songs that I love.

The phrase 'saying what I like to sing and to the song' is incorrect. The verb 'sing' should be followed directly by the object without 'to'. Also, 'saying' is incorrect here; 'sing' is the correct verb. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and avoid unnecessary prepositions after verbs like 'sing'.

× Say it just want to sing for myself because I'm not and really outgoing person, I'm pretty shy.

✓ I just want to sing for myself because I'm not a really outgoing person; I'm pretty shy.

'Say it' is incorrect; the subject should be 'I'. Also, 'and' should be 'a' before 'really outgoing person'. Suggestion: Use correct subject pronouns and articles before nouns.

× I I can make a good presentation but sing in front of many people is not my thing.

✓ I can make a good presentation, but singing in front of many people is not my thing.

The sentence lacks parallel structure. 'Sing' should be in gerund form 'singing' to function as the subject of the clause. Suggestion: Use gerunds after conjunctions when the verb acts as a noun.

× So just myself or maybe my lover, my boyfriend.

✓ So just for myself or maybe for my lover, my boyfriend.

The phrase lacks the preposition 'for' which is necessary to indicate the recipient of the singing. Suggestion: Use appropriate prepositions with pronouns to clarify meaning.

× Yes, I truly believe that singing can bring hapiness and fun to people.

✓ Yes, I truly believe that singing can bring happiness and fun to people.

The word 'hapiness' is misspelled; the correct spelling is 'happiness'. Suggestion: Check spelling to ensure correct word usage.

× Music brings so much joy Ann like happy in every each person life.

✓ Music brings so much joy and happiness in every person's life.

'Ann like happy' is incorrect; it should be 'and happiness'. Also, 'every each person life' is incorrect; it should be 'every person's life'. Suggestion: Use correct conjunctions and possessive forms to improve clarity.