Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc, có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, đồng thời cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn. Hãy chú ý đến việc sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và logic hơn.

例: No, I don't like singing because I feel that my voice is not very good. When I was younger, I used to sing sometimes, but now I find it embarrassing and I prefer not to sing in front of others.

提案: Bạn cần trả lời câu hỏi một cách rõ ràng và chính xác hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như thì động từ và cấu trúc câu. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because I believe my voice is not very good, so I have never wanted to take singing lessons.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích rõ ràng hơn. Đồng thời, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I don't want to sing for anyone because I dislike my voice. Therefore, I never sing in front of my relatives or friends.

提案: Bạn đã cố gắng trả lời chi tiết nhưng câu trả lời còn nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp, cấu trúc câu rõ ràng và liên kết ý tưởng mạch lạc hơn để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions. Moreover, singing in a group or choir can create a joyful atmosphere and improve people's mood.

× Well, no, I don't really enjoy singing.

✓ Well, no, I don't really enjoy singing.

This sentence is grammatically correct in the present tense and does not require correction.

× Well, when I was I used to sing because I think that my voice is really that it missed by heaven and it was really talented.

✓ Well, when I was younger, I used to sing because I thought that my voice was really special and talented.

The original sentence has incomplete and confusing structure. 'When I was' is incomplete without specifying 'younger' or an age. 'I think' should be in past tense 'I thought' to match 'used to sing'. The phrase 'my voice is really that it missed by heaven' is incorrect and unclear; it is corrected to 'my voice was really special and talented' to convey intended meaning clearly.

× But nowadays I find that I was really.

✓ But nowadays I find that I am really embarrassed.

The sentence is incomplete and mixes tenses. 'I was really' is past tense, but 'nowadays' indicates present tense, so 'I am really embarrassed' is appropriate.

× Embarrassing and I never enjoy seeing after them.

✓ Embarrassing and I never enjoy singing anymore.

'Seeing' is incorrect; the intended word is 'singing'. 'After them' is unclear and unnecessary. 'Never enjoy singing anymore' fits the context and tense.

× Well, I never learn how to sing before because I think that my voice is really really impressed, missing from others, so I never.

✓ Well, I have never learned how to sing before because I think that my voice is really different from others, so I never have.

'Never learn' should be 'have never learned' to indicate past experience. 'Impressed, missing from others' is incorrect; corrected to 'different from others' to express uniqueness. 'So I never' is incomplete; completed as 'so I never have'.

× Ever want to learn to sing before?

✓ I have never wanted to learn to sing before.

The original is a fragment and a question, but context suggests a statement. Corrected to a complete sentence with proper tense and structure.

× Well, I never want to sing anything to anybody because I really hate my voice, so I never seem to anyone else.

✓ Well, I never want to sing anything to anybody because I really hate my voice, so I never sing to anyone else.

'Seem' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'sing'. Present tense 'never want' is acceptable here.

× Especially my relative and my friends.

✓ Especially my relatives and my friends.

'Relative' should be plural 'relatives' to match 'friends'. No preposition error but plural form is needed.

× Well absolutely, I believe just singing can definitely bring happiness to people because sending allows withdrawal to express the emotions and can be uplifting well when done with others in the group or core.

✓ Well, absolutely, I believe that singing can definitely bring happiness to people because singing allows individuals to express their emotions and can be uplifting when done with others in a group or choir.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'sending' should be 'singing'; 'withdrawal' is incorrect, replaced with 'individuals'; 'express the emotions' corrected to 'express their emotions'; 'well' misplaced and removed; 'core' corrected to 'choir'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× While many people feel joyful, address where they sing their favorite songs which helped her improve their mood.

✓ Many people feel joyful when they sing their favorite songs, which helps improve their mood.

The original sentence is confusing and contains errors: 'address where' is incorrect and removed; 'helped her' is incorrect pronoun and tense, corrected to 'helps'; sentence restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.