Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了不喜欢唱歌的原因，但语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议练习使用完整句子表达原因，并避免重复和断断续续的表达。

例: I don't really like singing because I feel shy and embarrassed to show my voice in front of others. However, I enjoy listening to music very much.

提案: 回答中存在严重语法错误和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议加强基础语法和词汇学习，尤其是动词的正确使用，并尝试用简单句子清楚表达学习经历。

例: When I was a young girl, my parents allowed me to learn how to sing. However, I didn't have much talent for singing, so I also learned to play some musical instruments.

提案: 回答中有很多拼写和语法错误，且表达不连贯。建议注意单词拼写，使用正确的词汇表达情感和原因，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I prefer to sing for my family and close friends because when I was feeling depressed, they gave me a lot of support and encouragement, which motivated me to improve myself.

提案: 回答中有拼写错误和语法错误，句子不完整，表达不够清晰。建议练习使用完整句子，注意拼写和语法，使用具体例子支持观点。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. It is a great way to express emotions and relieve stress. For example, when people sing their favorite songs happily with friends, it helps them feel more relaxed.

× Well I don't really like singing cause is so shy or embarrassed.

✓ Well, I don't really like singing because I am so shy or embarrassed.

句子缺少主语，导致结构不完整。应补充主语“I am”使句子完整。

× Why show my vocal in front of others?

✓ Why should I show my vocals in front of others?

缺少主语和助动词，且“vocal”应为复数形式“vocals”，表示歌唱能力。

× Well, when I was a young girl, my parents allowed me to learn something about sending.

✓ Well, when I was a young girl, my parents allowed me to learn something about singing.

单词拼写错误，“sending”应为“singing”。

× I don't have ability of sending so item 2.

✓ I don't have the ability to sing, so I stopped.

表达不清且单词错误，“sending”应为“singing”，且“item 2”无意义，应改为“stopped”表示停止。

× Then something like Instruments.

✓ Then I learned something like instruments.

句子缺少主语和谓语，需补充完整。

× I have two trolls.

✓ I have two goals.

“trolls”与语境不符，应为“goals”表示目标。

× I prefer two things for my family and my close friends because when I was a depressus, my friends and my family give me a lot of sports.

✓ I prefer to sing for my family and my close friends because when I was depressed, my friends and my family gave me a lot of support.

“depressus”拼写错误，应为“depressed”；“sports”应为“support”；时态需一致。

× They encouraged me. Motive me to improve myself.

✓ They encouraged me and motivated me to improve myself.

“Motive”用法错误，应为动词“motivated”，且两个句子应合并。

× Yes, I think sending Hembree happenes to people.

✓ Yes, I think singing brings happiness to people.

“sending”应为“singing”，“Hembree”应为“happiness”，“happenes”应为“happens”或改为“brings”。

× It's the best way to experience emotions and. Relieves stress.

✓ It's the best way to experience emotions and relieve stress.

句子断开且动词形式不一致，应使用并列动词不定式形式。

× For example people you really sending their favorite song in Katy way with their friends.

✓ For example, people really sing their favorite songs in a happy way with their friends.

“you”多余且错误，“sending”应为“sing”，“Katy way”应为“happy way”，且“song”应为复数“songs”。

× It makes them feel more relaxed.

✓ It makes them feel more relaxed.

句子正确，无需修改。