Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then explain briefly with clear and natural language. Avoid vague phrases like 'somewhere I am a bathroom singer'.

例: I don't like singing in public, but I enjoy music a lot. Sometimes, I sing quietly to myself in the bathroom because it feels relaxing.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical mistakes. Please answer directly whether you have learnt singing or not, then add supporting details with linking words. Keep sentences clear and concise.

例: I have never formally learnt how to sing, but I did learn to play the guitar many years ago. While playing, I often sang along, which helped me improve a little.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to respond directly, then give specific examples with proper linking words. Avoid incomplete or unclear words like 'rhyme Ng. Song'.

例: I haven't really thought about it before, but I would like to sing for my wife and my mother. For example, I might sing a lullaby or a special song to make them happy on special occasions.

提案: Your answer shows good ideas but is not very clear and has grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and express them clearly. Avoid vague phrases like 'main source we can use to prevent people from fighting'.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. Moreover, it helps create closeness among people because singing together can reduce conflicts. Therefore, singing is a great way to uplift everyone's mood.

× I don't like singing but I am very keen about music, so somewhere I am a bathroom singer as I can define myself.

✓ I don't like singing, but I am very keen on music, so I can define myself as a bathroom singer.

The conjunction 'but' should be preceded by a comma when connecting two independent clauses. Also, 'keen about' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'keen on'. The phrase 'somewhere I am a bathroom singer as I can define myself' is awkward; it is clearer to say 'I can define myself as a bathroom singer'. This improves sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Will I never tried to learn singing, however I learn how to play guitar which is also linked to singing I guess.

✓ I have never tried to learn singing; however, I have learned how to play the guitar, which is also linked to singing, I guess.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'Will' at the beginning, which is inappropriate here. The correct form is present perfect 'I have never tried'. Also, 'learn' should be 'have learned' to maintain tense consistency. Adding semicolons and commas improves sentence structure and clarity.

× So at that time I start mumbling in my head an.

✓ So at that time, I started mumbling in my head.

The phrase 'at that time' indicates past tense, so the verb should be in past tense 'started' instead of present tense 'start'. Also, 'an' at the end is incomplete and should be removed.

× Like I started singing, so somewhere I learned a little bit, but I play the guitar very long time ago.

✓ I started singing, so I learned a little bit, but I played the guitar a very long time ago.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Play' should be in past tense 'played' to match 'a very long time ago'. Removing 'Like' at the beginning improves formality and clarity.

× Well that's not have thought about it, but I do prefer to sing for my wife and my mom.

✓ Well, I haven't thought about it, but I do prefer to sing for my wife and my mom.

The phrase 'that's not have thought about it' is ungrammatical. The correct form is 'I haven't thought about it'. Adding a comma after 'Well' improves sentence flow.

× To make them happy on the special occasion I can like sing a lullaby or a rhyme Ng. Song.

✓ To make them happy on special occasions, I can sing a lullaby or a rhyme song.

'On the special occasion' should be plural 'on special occasions' for general statements. The phrase 'I can like sing' is incorrect; 'I can sing' is correct. 'Rhyme Ng. Song' seems to be a typo and is corrected to 'rhyme song'.

× Yes, I do think singing can actually bring happiness to people and even.

✓ Yes, I do think singing can actually bring happiness to people.

The word 'even' at the end is incomplete and creates an incomplete sentence. Removing it corrects the sentence structure.

× It brings closeness regards everybody because singing is the main source we can use to prevent people from fighting.

✓ It brings closeness among everybody because singing is the main source we can use to prevent people from fighting.

The phrase 'closeness regards everybody' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'among' to indicate closeness between people. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× So I guess singing would be the best to uplift the mood also.

✓ So I guess singing would also be the best way to uplift the mood.

The original sentence has awkward word order. Placing 'also' before 'be the best' and adding 'way' clarifies the meaning and improves sentence flow.